wow... maybe you should have had Ron turn into a merman but...wow...alot of action

What happened to shego and drakken? Any way I love it A

Woohoo! *pumps air with fists* That was the most awesomest kimxron I've ever read! *starry-eyed* Although, might I suggest an alternate ending? Ron tries to save Kim, but Drakken shoots him with his laser & he turns into a merman (suprise suprise) with a blue tail (maybe? *sly grin*) and, realizing his tail, drags himself to Kim and they both jump into the water and swim off into the sunset forever... Gosh, I just love sappy endings... :P

That was just so sweet! 4.8 stars!

Duh gross. I really like your writing. I'm pretty sure I'm adding you to my fave list. You're writing's great! :)

Uhh, I forgot what I was going to say. I thought of it in the middle of this chapter, then once I got to the end I forgot. OH well, I made something up just a second ago. How is Kim supposed to know what contractions feel like? That was a little weird.

Ron is so sweet! you are doing great! The other KP Fan Fics I've read weren't good at capturing the spirit of the original characters, but you're just a tad off the the originals. Yay you!

It's a roundhouse kick, not a "spin kick". Ever taken Tae Kwon Do?

Yeah, it was a little rushed, but I really liked it!

loved it you should write a sequal when they're older and are getting married but drakken and shego try to break them up that would be awesome

love

rebecca

Dear Oribella

Your right, your last chapter was a little rushed, but still very creative!

The early segments between Kim and Ron were very profound; their remorse; having fun in the water, and realizing the love they had for each-other.

The following segments are very creative; full of suspense, gags, complexity and emotion; Drakken's tries to capture Kim; Kim's in trouble, Ron tries to protect her from Shego, and it was great the way he had one of his random monkey powers resurfacing moments and gets an edge over Shego. it was tense (and interesting) when Shego became a mermaid, and being in the water was dangerous to Ron when she pulled him underwater; but his love for Kim gave him the strengh to clobber Shego so he can surface for air and focus on saving Kim. It was great when he gets to the ray gun and fights Drakken (fair fight; kind of like Kim fighting Shego); so full of depth with Drakken's scorn for the sidekick, but Ron's love for Kim makes him more then that and then he sends Dr. D over the edge of the ship they were on. Tense and amusing when Kim is on the beach and can't breath; but Ron can use the ray gun to turn her normal; then Shego returns (having legs again) and attacks; Ron zaps her (turning her to a mermaid) and then zaps Kim.

The following sequences are creative and profound.

Kim is alright and normal again and Ron takes care of her. The scene with Kim's family was good too; I like that Kim and Mom both made up (and there was no negative attitude between Kim and her twin brothers). And the final segment between Ron and Kim was very profound and romantic.

Curious though; did Shego became normal? I think she did because the Aqua Ray hit her four times (mermaid/normal; mermaid/unrevealed) but I don't know for certain.

The last thing I will compliment on is the highness of the wholesome standards.

The language is clean!

There is no extreme violence.

There is no suggestive content; namely your careful about the romance between Kim and Ron; and that you were not discriptive about Kim not having clothes when turned normal; she got zapped then scene changed to a very tired Kim being carried by Ron and wearing some clothing Ron gave her (Very good of Ron to respect Kim's digity). And a special thanks to you for taking my concerns seriously!

I hope this review has a good influence on you. God bless.

Data Seeker

P.S. I also hope to get a reply from you.

great story, i enjoyed it much. excellent.

thats a good story you got the charaters in there order its like reading a book on the actual cartoon teentitans is my faviort but i now kim posible even better i always thoght ron stoppable and kim possible made a weird cople but loves love and you can mess with that. ever want any tips or any thing e-mail me at laters FYI your a natural writer i love writting good work and good luck on your next story...

It certainly was interesting. Though, I would have thought that Kim being in the water would have staved off such attacks. Oh well. _ Overall it was really decently done. I wouldn't have minded more, but oh well. It was good as it was. Although, I think the general idea of helping Kim had been to have her zapped again. But it was still quite amusing. Especially when Ron was able to beat Shego. Anyway, thanks for posting it. It was really enjoyable. _

More please!