This is still so damn good. Got to love Regulus, honestly. My vocabluary for creative wit is increasing, I do believe. Dumbledore is done so well it's almost as if he was right here and alive; his essence has been captured so vividly it seems to transcend the text almost - that, which of course comes from the text itself. This entire story is so ... real. Thank you for writing this. There's only one Harry Potter series and two Harry Potter books that compare to this. How is the next revised chapter coming along?

Hmm… interesting. Kalliandra is definitely the most interesting character thus far. She’s… rather ignorant, it would appear. So a Reath is something that can’t incant… intriguing. Yet, in the previous chapter, Remus mentioned something along the lines of “I don’t want to make that thing mad.” Granted, Kalliandra also was pondering being a mutation, of sorts? Perhaps she’s weaker than the average Reath? Borgin called her a muggle, which is odd. Perhaps he doesn’t understand the scope of the situation, but in reality, he probably knows much more than me. I do hope we learn more about at least Reaths in general soon, even if you hold out on Kalliandra’s uniqueness for awhile. It is by far the thing that has me most curious right now. The stuff with Tonks and Kingsley was good. Tonks seems rather fun. Kingsley and the Order are being stifling in regards to Harry, which is oddly annoying but not unexpected.

Aside from a few typos, it was a fun chapter. I was worried Harry wasn’t going to get a “voice” that would distinguish him from the others after the first chapter, but it seems like you managed to establish it about halfway through this one, so a positive there as well.

All in all, solid chapter, and I’m eager to get to the point of the story where I’m not super confused.

“Statute of a centaur…” you mean “statue”. A statute is a bill of law.

“Take them to Hogsmeade the escape they needed…” you need a comma after Hogsmeade.

“‘Protego!’ bellowed…” should be “Harry bellowed…”

“and the boy besides her…” should be “beside her”.

“Kinglsey” it’s “Kingsley”.

“Titching his wand” should be “twitching his wand”

These are just a few errors I spotted. There are others, too. (A number of them, actually) You had Tonk’s when it should have been “Tonks’” by example, and there were some off-putting commas/lack of commas.

In spite of that, it was an enjoyable first chapter. Your stories have come up quite a bit in the fanfic discussion/recommendation channels on my Discord server, so I decided to give this one a shot. I will almost definitely not be reviewing each chapter in this level of detail in terms of revisions. Mainly because I can’t copy and paste text off of , so it makes pointing stuff out in reviews a right pain.

Speaking of reviews, whether I will review every chapter or not remains to be seen. Either way, expect reviews to come in VERY slowly. I am about to do a deep dive back into Greek mythology, so that will probably take up much of my reading time. On top of that, I do have my own fics to write, two of which will easily surpass a million words at some point down the road. That’s not even mentioning me being a professional athlete and all the rest in my personal life, so yeah… apologies for that in advance.

As for the chapter itself — not a whole lot to comment on since it was an introduction, of sorts. I’m curious about the “Reeth” and interested in learning more about what makes them so special. That’s probably my biggest intrigue after this chapter, though the muggle girl is also intriguing. A seer, I would assume? Either way, enjoyable first chapter and I will keep reading… just very slowly, more than likely.

Oh my ...

Where to start. As a disclaimer, I was reading your fic for the past week. The least I could say is that I enjoyed it. A lot. A fucking lot. And it's a fucking A grade fic (sorry for the swearing, it'll get better).

You created a great storyline, and the time turner involvement is extremely well handled. It adds a huge deep to the story, while staying believable, never falling in the "I'm overpowered" zone. When I got at the point with the second phase after the Forbidden Forest part, I was seriously awed at the complexity it would add. You handled it with brio, and I am extremely hopeful for the next chapters.

Let's talk about the pirate treasure hunt and the cemetery stroll. Both felt epics, if not messy. Messy is good, the reader get a bit lost, and you end up conveying a feeling of "Things get extremely messy in the story, it's not clean, it's not nice, and it's certainely not easy". I was extremely happy to read the sex scene in the cemetary. Not because I'm a perv (well I am, but that's not the point) but because you managed to make it real quick enough, mixing horcruxes elements at start without being too hard on this, creating a morbid fascination about what would happen (and end up happening). Overall, I would comment saying the cemetary arc is a bit more well written and clearer than the Pirate island's one in my opinion (and opinions are worth exactly what they are worth - nothing).

On a less positive note, I almost grew tired of the fighting in the main couple. While it was extremely interesting to see their relationship grows and deepens, especially when they started talking for real in the infirmary, and later in the cottage, I felt like there was way too much "free" drama which didn't end up building something (or breaking something) in their relationship. May be i'm too old for this, and that's how teenage drama works overall.

I am eagerly waiting for the next chapter, but please take all the time needed to stay safe and get some rest during those Covid-19 times.

Thank you for making me dream for more than one week :)

Words cannot describe just how much I love this story. Hope everything gets better for you, and I can’t wait for the next chapter! Keep up the great work!

Harry... Really isn't too bright in this fix, is he?

I now realize what that one comment was saying about sexy times then suddenly dementors HAHAHA

love the story, man only took like a week to read the whole thing.

bruh, I usually skim over some parts that are too wordy, but this chapter tho. Ron has my respectonly for this fanfic HAHA

love the story I found it like 3 days ago and am already almost 70 chapters in cant put it down.

Oh ... wow ... what a gem. No, seriously, this is a gem, a complete and utter masterpiece from what I've seen so far. Writing? Superb. Characterisation? Complicated, three-dimensional, authentic. Plot so far? Fucking interesting. I'm aspiring to this kind of gritty war fiction myself, which means I'll be sticking to this the whole way through - I'm three hundred thousand words into a series of original fiction, and from the standard of this story alone I can tell that I am in for some very potent shit, to put that crudely. And I do so have seventy-nine chapters to catch up on...

Dean Thomas you are growing on me again.

Only these two would wind up admitting they loved one another after a huge fight where they did not resolve any differences. As if that is not enough, you get them laid finally and then attack them with dementors. That's downright villainous.

Too bad Regulus isn't in the background chanting fight, fight, fight!

The visuals you make in these I am in love with.