Yo Yuki!

I wuved it! Heh heh heh I read it again...

Wuvvy doo doo!

-me

Did you edit this many times or have someone edit it? either way this was very well written. I could picture the scene unfolding with each line i read. I believe you should continue, this looks to be a great start to a great story.

Good for a first fanfic I liked it but i got some bugs to pic: One its spelled Shuichi not Shouchi. Number 2: Yuki will never be the soft and gentle to Shuichi ever. Like I'm in the middle a grav mpreg and yuki still aint nice. But other then that i totally loved the story and u should continue to write more...i really really liked it also very poetic! Loved it!

Your Friend,

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