one suggestion is to use smaller paragraphs!

what happens after the war and what the twins do leading up to going to Hogwarts and what happens at Hogwarts. If Harry and Ginny have more children

Sequel... PERLEEEEEEEESE. I'm begging you!

Your story is excellent however please create a new paragraph for spoken work... It is hard to read the italics and in the middle of paragraphs.

I really liked your story are you going to continue it? I really hope you do. I think that you are a really good writter. Keep up the good work.

Brilliant and thanks for writing.

This story is great! I can’t wait to read more.

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Either way, good luck with your writing!

Melora Brockert, SUM student

Great story! I stayed up until I finished reading your story.

You did very good job. My only issue is that you sometime throw in new things without warning or building up or even without explanation, such as Heirs. Other than that, it was very good. I suggest that if you plan to rewrite your wonderful story, just put in hints or events that lead up to it, assuming it is not a sudden or shocking event such as the facts about Petunia.

I really enjoyed the byplay between Harry and Ginny, as well Kathryn and Draco. I liked how you are able to combine teh actions with romance. Just one question, I thought you had planned to get Draco and Kathryn married during Easter but the event was not covered? Did they postponed it? Keep up with good work. :)

Eagerly looking forward to another chapter! :D

Great story so far!

Your plot is good and fun to read. There were few problems with your story but some of them were resolved by now such as block of text that is annoying to read. Now it is much easier to read, good job :D Thank you! Your writing has improved in a long way since your first chapter and congrats on that.

There are a bit confusion in facts, such as Ginny's age and year. I mean, you implied that she was the same age and year with Harry. Is she a younger twin sister of Ron? However it is only a minor detail.

There is one major confusion to me, how could Severus being a brother of Lily and didn't know that Harry is her son? A sentence about this in the middle of this chapter, "Harry stepped in to intervene, “Mum stop he did not know I was your son." How is that possible, especially since earlier you seemed to have Severus knew Harry was his nephew but tried to hide that fact from Voldemort and his spies.

This is only up until now and I am reading more now but I thought you would like to know what I am thinking of your story at this point. You did a good job with this story and you only need to clean up a bit. Perhaps after the story is complete? I hope this is a helpful review for you and that I didn't hurt your feeling.

Love the story, hope to see an update soon.

Interesting!

i love it! i love it! i love it! i love it! i love it! i love it! i love it! i love it! i love it! i love it! i love it! I LOVE IT! More please!

Ok, good potential in a story, but, go back and revise it. It's like it's droning on, you know? I mean, I'm not trying to be rude or anything, but, go back, revise it, and it'll be so much better and easier to understand. This story has great potential, but it's kind of hard for me to comprehend. If you go back and revise some things, this would be a great fanfiction.

Paragraphs!

love the update