Interesting story, I hope that you decide to finish it one day. Would love to see how this develops and ends. Thanks!

very intriguing so far!

I really like the story so far. I hope you are going to continue it some time :)

I love your story and I am looking forward to a new chapter!

YAY your back

loved the chapter cant wait for the next on

I hope you continue the story!Your OC,Alex,is a really cool character and i like her alot!I hope you update!

I really wish you would continue with this story. I rather think Alex is a spunky protagonist, and I'd like to see what happens next!

I had no idea the Drow were not part of the LotR world, and they do fit well. Since this is AU, I don't think it matters what you make up, as long as it is well written, which it is!

Kinky! It was unexpected, but was totally worth it! I think he likes her but is trying not to admit it!

Really good story. I can't wait to read more.

i have to thank you for such an entertaining story.

Alex stood with her mouth open. She couldn’t believe he was blaming their little indiscretion on her! How could he hold her accountable for something she had responded to in her sleep? I just love that statement. if it was me i think i would have sighed and asked why not but i am just a Haldir addict

What a turn of events! I didn't mind the little bit of kinkyness in the last chapter, and as for the review left ny I.H.N, what he/she said was a bit overboard! It's fanfiction, and is meant to be AU. I quite like the idea of the Drow Elves, and until you pointed it out, I didn't even realise that they weren't part of Middle Earth!

Thank you for replying to my review, that was most kind!

I liked this chapter a lot better than chapter 4... the sexual intimacy seemed kind of rushed and not at all what I had expected would be their first encounter of that sort.

Chapter 5 kind of showed the type of Haldir we all know and love... mysterious and aloof... leaving everyone wondering what he is thinking and why does he behave the way he does. Good job!

excellant start keep going.

Well, your story is not bad, I think. There are paragraphs, spelling and grammar are seeming alright, and your Alex is not nearly as annoying as the summary indicates.

Ah, yes, that brings me to one of the problems I have here. While your character is not annoying, her special powers are still exceedingly strange. Such powers simply do not belong into Middle-earth. Sure, certain very powerful individuals there (Elrond, the Witchking, Galadriel) can control the 'elements' in their domain, but all of them are very powerful, very old and they can only control the 'elements' in their realms and nowhere else (the Witchking had a tendency to control the weather in his realm, Elrond used the Bruinen in stead of a wall, Galadriel made time run ten times slower in Lothlorien and so on).

However, nobody in Middle-earth can simply go to a place and seize control of the weather there. Such things take time, lots of time. You should really explain why Alex can do that, and why it works in Middle-earth.

Secondly, there are your 'Drow'. The problem with them is that they simply do not exist in Middle-earth. There are 'Dark Elves' there, yes, but they are not malevolent cave-dwellers. Haldir is a Dark Elf, for example, as is his lord, Celeborn (where is he, by the way?). Elrond, his children, Thranduil, Legolas and many others are Moriquendi (Dark-Elves) too. The only real 'Light-Elves' we get to see in Lord Of The Rings are the Elves of Gildor's band and Galadriel.

Thirdly, things are moving a little to fast for my taste. Haldir has met your character three days ago, and they already have a sexual (more or less) relationship? You do know, that Elves do not rush such things, do you? They have all the time of the world (literally) to get intimate with their lovers. Sure, their emotions can overwhelm them, at times, but concerning such matters as love, they tend to be very careful, usually. So, please take care when writing about such things. And why would Haldir know about the insides of female Elves, when he is not married, that is, if he never had sex with somebody (sex and marriage are equivalent, to the Elves)?

Finally, please make sure that your character will not become the center of Middle-earth. If your summary is any indication, it seems that your Alex will become extremely important for the safety of Middle-earth. In my eyes, that looks a little strange, especially since there still are Elves like Celeborn, Thranduil and the sons of Elrond left in Middle-earth, who really should be able to handle such threats. Do not upstage all these great and powerful characters with your OC, please.

Ah well, as I said, your story is quite good, so please keep writing, but it could not hurt if you would explain the powers of your character, as well as the presence of these 'Drow'.

P.S: By the way, what is Gandalf still doing in Middle-earth? Should he not have sailed with the Ring-bearers to Valinor (which is his home, by the way, not a kind of Elven afterlife)?