loved this!

The chaotic style of the writing just adds to the intensity of the story. And the end left me in tears. Great job!

Beautiful story and it's great to see Don from someone else's POV. Thanks, Beth

Wow... Absolutely beautiful... I love this story. The pattern of writing mimiced almost perfectly what you can imagine someone's thoughts would be in this situation: disjointed, confused, panicked...

Very nicely written, and actually one of my favorite conepts to speculate on, the points of view of the other people, the ones they don't really mention. I absolutely love it!

I'm speechless. This was a beautiful piece. It is so nice to see someone who put some real thought into their work. This was a powerful, emotional one shot, and I enjoyed every second of it. You had me close to tears by the end, and that is not an easy thing to do. Keep writing for you are truly gifted at it.

Oh, geez, that's beautiful. A good concept, well executed (thank you for no typos & good punctuation & grammar!), and most of all, you had the guts to reach down into your heart and pull your feelings out and lay them out on paper for us all to see. Very nice - I hope you write more! Becky, wiping a tear or two