Dragon (not wings, not fire) is maybe not bad?

Marlena Kinga Telep.

I love the way you write chase, it's literally perfect

That's what demons do, the really smart ones - find a person's fatal flaw, the worst chink in the armor of their morality, and exploit the hell out of it. I can actually see the (slight) difference in the narration before and after drinking the soup.

Well, this is a real sweet deal from the less-than-5-minute details of Chase's life on Xiaolin Showdown, more details and inner thought. Reason why I love books, it gives more information but TV show let so much graphics and visual-ness!

He never regretted it, huh? Hmm ... interesting

Brr. Chilling.

But very lovely! Thank you for posting. :)

That. Was. Epic! 8D

I love the way you capture his humane essence in a sense where his "deal maker" was of thought that a natural weakness such as image, since in his youth, he would have never thought past the "finish line state" and thoughts of such he naturally feared, since he is pridominately a proud character.

However, I found it a bit character derailing to only focus Chase's reason to take the apple was because of his fear of aged "image" rather than physical deformation (countered multiple times by the elder monks "retaining" their strength in their golden years), only for him to accept the grotesque form he would come by in the latter, plus to involve no one else gave the problem focus, but made it feel like no one else influences the desicion, leaving a "unanswered" feeling of doubt for the true meaning explained, somewhat.

Other than that, this was a story that brought a good aspect of the "red demon's deal" to light.

Kudos.

BSE

This was extremely well written, I must say. Great job.

wow!

Again very well written and you got Chase's character perfectly.

Hey, i strongly agree w your story, you write like i do! the demons in my fan fic too,(unfortunately, i cant get my story to the right fomat to post it)but anyways. just wanted to say you r an awsome writer and to keep on writing

O.O Wow, wish that could happen for real heh _

I prefer the EVIL Chase over the GOOD one. Good story!

This is much much cooler than what really happened.

Proper speachmarks would have made it even cooler, but hey the story still rocks

Beautiful! Just beautiful. You captured Chase's feelings and conflicting emotions so...awesomely. *FAVED*

Bravo! (claps furiously) This is written SO well! No spelling or grammar mistakes and well...basically very very good! :)

OMG. Woah. Superb! And I haven't seen your name about these parts before. _-

I love how you refer to Guan in every way but name, and how you've given dubiously!good!Chase motive.