Hey it's Kellie (just in case you forgot my penname)

Very well done! I'd have to say though, the BOLD print really got old though. Just change that and you'll be set! _

if you ever become an author, i am so buying your books

Smexy story of Smexyness please update soon.

Okay, this chapter was pretty good, I would like to make a constructive comment though. Instead of using things like Alladen and Alien vs. Predator to awaken the inner eye of your readers, try to describe the castle with descriptions that you use. Other then that, good job. I still like Gregory, and good job about describing the portal. _ Keep it up.

~IceAngel5~

Nicely done! _ I remember you talking about this. I do like Gregory though, just because he knows everything right now. Well written...a bit short though.

~IceAngel5~

(Kellie)