I second Bronwynn's review. Glad to see Evil-Lyn step in to protect Teela's but also get one over on Skeletor.

good story

I thought this was really well done. I loved your portrayal of the characters - they seemed very real and believable in their emotions. I especially loved the twist with Evil-Lyn in the end. It is nice to know that a girl can be a villain and still identify with other women.

hey this was a great story...koodos to the author...i absolutely loved it, and better yet, what would have happened if he-man went after skelly...im thinking of working on a love triangle between he-man, skelly and teela...and see where that goes...

Very well done. Lots of good orignal plot points and the flow was excellent. Lyn really is brillant. I would love to see more done with this storyline.

Thanks for finishing this! Great chapter!

Now He-Man is going to be really, REALLY mad at Skeletor. (If you have idea's along those lines, go for it!)

I _loved_ that it was as Adam that he came to comfort her. Although I did wonder how much he knew. Did Teela tell He-Man on the way back to the palace or did the Sorceress tell him?

Thanks again for writing!

Yay! Rescue!

I thought he just had a thing for beastman

Heh, I'm enjoying your story so far. For some reason, it reminds me of my own. I love your portrayal of Adam/He-man, which is really cool, cause I never really liked him to begin with. I laughed out loud with the "piece of ass" comment. I can actually see Merman (or even Trapjaw) saying something like that. Men are men, what can I say? Can't wait for the next chapter, and good luck!

Hey cool! New chapter. Wonderful to see.

I very much enjoyed seeing Teela get a little back. She is a good fighter. Nice to see it.

Still haven't figured out the cause of Skelator's little problem.

Although I can't wait to find out who is watching from the Shadows. :D

Enjoyed Teela's show of courage, including running to the unidentified sound.

Looking forward to reading about He-Man's reaction when he sees her, and the condition of her body suit. (Thank you very much for that btw! )

Damn, last chapter so far. I hope you update soon. You just CANT leave Teela stuck like that. You’ve done the hurt, now we need to get to the comfort.

OK. I thought of a third reason that Evil-Lyn could be hexing Skeletor – just to be mean. That works too. OR it could be some sort of protective spell placed on Teela a long time ago. Let us know!

Although so fight scenes would work too. And you could specify what Teela is wearing right now. I’m a little unclear of how much of her uniform is still intact.

Hurry.

Interesting. I hope you will let us in on the cause of Skeletor’s little … problem? I am thinking it is got to be either the Sorceress or Evil-Lyn. Either of the two reasons that Evil-Lyn might be doing it (jealous of Skeletor, protecting a fellow female) could be extremely interesting. I would think that if the Sorceress were aware of Teela’s situation then she would be doing a little more, but what do I know.

WOW again. If this is your idea of ‘M’ I would …actually be very interested in reading what you would consider MA or ‘adult’. If you ever post a version of this on adult fan fiction dot net, let me know.

I would have liked some of Teela’s point of view at the end. This is powerful stuff.

Moderate? That may be an understatement. But, WOW!

I know this is probably a bizarre reaction on my part, but the thought of Skeletor saying the word ‘fuck’ made me laugh. I don’t know why.

The depiction of Teela’s suffering was well done, although considering everything that happened there could have been more of it.

Skeletor’s two pronged attack was ruthless, intelligent and realistic. The first, obvious physical/sexual assault and the second a psychological assault, trying to convince Teela that she will be unwanted by He-Man (whom she presumably wants) after.

I like this grown-up AU you have created. In the series even the bad guys 'played nice', which while inoffensive to parents was even more unrealistic that the magic and woman that changed into a bird, IMHO.

I am not certain if the young guardsman giving the message to Adam is supposed to be a clue or if he was simply addressing the highest ranking person in the room.

I very much liked it when Adam said, "She better be alright," You indicate not only are things not so childish here, but also show that Adam/He-Man does indeed have feelings for Teela.

I personally hope that they are slightly more than sisterly. They did grow up together. But still, how exciting would that be.

Thanks

Whoa! "“A piece of ass,” replies Mer-man." comment was ... attention getting.

This version of Eternia has definitely grown up, but that is OK, so have I.

Thanks,