i think the story is brill. It went a bit fast though but dont worry the goodness of it made up 4 it.

u r brill that was long but really really really really god!

To be honest, I was kinda gettin into despite the few spelling and grammer mistakes. however, just one thing, after getting half way thru the story I was disgusted!I think it was in really poor taste mentioning September 11th in such a 'i dont care attitute' thats just my opinion i thought it was poor taste and kinda put me of the story.