Reviews for That Which Tears Us Apart Part I of 3
StarfyreMaiden chapter 21 . 9/11/2015
So sweet.
Cutter12 chapter 1 . 9/19/2010
Throughout this whole story I read one chapter after another, and snarled at anybody who tried to take me away from it. Thanks for a very compelling story.
Potterworm chapter 21 . 7/23/2010
I can't believe this was your first fanfiction. Amazing.
Jess S1 chapter 21 . 5/22/2009
...B-But if that's the end I'm supposed to go to bed now! *pouts*

Anyway. GREAT job on this whole fic. Especially since it was your first one. You did a good job of keeping all of our beloved canon-characters in-character, a great job with your original characters, good pace, lovely imagery (you seem to be really good at that, I'm jealous), and overall just very well written.

Thanks for the excellent reading material! :-D

*Looks at clock* Maybe I'll look at the sequel first. I could always printed it out to read on my break...
Jess S1 chapter 20 . 5/22/2009
ROTFLOL Bald-Megan really surprising suspects in interrogations. That's a FANTASTIC image! (Though, for some reason, the idea of her wearing the wig and deliberately taking it off in front of people she wants to surprise popped into my head there. But entering bald is beautiful too.)

"You Eppes men pass out a lot." I LOVE your doctor. :-D

And the interaction between the Eppes men was wonderful. Charlie losing chess, leaving teaching, taking up dating. All beautiful. Very well done.
Jess S1 chapter 19 . 5/22/2009
*snickers* I ADORE your doctor.

Though this one isn't Doctor 'Hurt Me', is it? I didn't realize that the one that gets stuff thrown at him probably wasn't the same one Charlie was seeing now till he surprised the nice nurse. Oh well, I guess he'll be Dr. Not-Seeing in my mind now. Or something like that. Maybe Sight-less?

Wonderful job on character development. Very touching. :-D
Jess S1 chapter 18 . 5/22/2009
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Again, VERY well done.

You almost had me in tears. Quite an accomplishment, considering I'm barely awake. I really shouldn't be awake. I have to get up and go to work in six hours and I haven't gone to bed yet. But I started reading through your stories and now I can't stop.

I'll finish this one, I guess. Then I'll make myself go to bed. Hopefully that'll work. Otherwise I'm gonna be a zombie at work.

Nonetheless, great job so far. _
Jess S1 chapter 17 . 5/22/2009
OK. I've now decided I've either never read this fic or never read past Chapter 16. Because I definitely would've remembered this chapter.

The light-hearted start with the jello, Don facing a talking spoon and the tie of-I think-the blue jello being the marrow Don was donating to Charlie (but maybe I'm reading too much into), was very well done.

I don't get to say poor Charlie in this chapter. Despite the hard time he's having, we didn't see him. But I do feel really bad for Don. And Alan, but more for Don.

You've kept both of them very well in-character. I can easily see Alan having a lot of trouble dealing with this, even if he hadn't already lost his wife, Charlie's mother, to the same illness years before.

And Don having to decide between the two of them again and again, and crying now when he can't get to either of them, was beautiful. Heart-breaking, too, but beautifully done.
Jess S1 chapter 16 . 5/22/2009
I don't think Don's "hurry up" was lame. If anything, it was probably pretty perfect for Charlie to hear. A reminder for why he has to get better. Which isn't easy.

Though the doctor's 'cancellation' made me sad for him. Considering it probably meant his other patient died. That HAS to be a hard profession to get in to. Understandably hysterical people throw stuff at him, and all too many die on him. :-(

Still, again: good job.
Jess S1 chapter 14 . 5/22/2009
...I think I've read this fic before. I'm not sure because I don't remember the end.

Nonetheless, it's letting me review, so I didn't review this chapter before. So here it is:

Beautiful. Absolutely beautiful.

A very touching response to the dilemma. And Amita's "grow it back together" reassurance was both heart-breaking and wonderful.

Well done. :-D

Now I'm going to keep reading. _
zookitty chapter 6 . 2/4/2009
haha I LOVE the end about the baseball, that was soo perfect

-Chris
Maimat B chapter 21 . 10/21/2008
Great story, I really enjoyed it
Kazuki Landen chapter 21 . 6/27/2008
That was very good... but I've cried too much :( I now plan to stalk you through your other fics.
Kazuki Landen chapter 14 . 6/27/2008
Gah, all the bits with Amita keep making me cry (more than the rest of it, anyway)
Kazuki Landen chapter 7 . 6/27/2008
I was absolutely fine until Amita started crying, and that was it. Very good so far, I'm very pleased to see you have loads of other fics too :)
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