That's an absolutly amazing beginning

God, is this story really abandoned. Oh noes. You've done it now, mate. I was so immersed in the plot, but now nothing is next :(
Double OOF

Oh come on! I was finally undestanding all those story figments you put at the beginning. XD

hey i just realised i wasnt signed in - i just wrote that essay review on chap 11 but my user is urban myths :)

-i love the aesthetic of this story, i think u manage to get it across really well and it really adds such an amazing layer of sophistication and violence and fury to the overall mood.
-if there is a pairing i think this would be a good fic to have characters be with multiple people, not in a polyamory way but like having an s/o and then breaking up w/ them and being with someone else. most fics i think dont really have the complexity of character to make that a viable option but urs really does, and i think u could do that in a way thats very enjoyable to read.
-your depiction of the peoples lives in this is also... just amazing. probably the best of its kind i've ever read. with stories like this its very easy to make it seem like the author is just idolising that lifestyle of the assassin/whore/party animal and because they idolise it so much they make it 2 dimensional, with nothing really bad, and none of the people being really bad either. however your characters lives, while full of excitement, are also full of superiority, which really makes you hate them, want to be them, and also pity them.
- the diversity in your story doesnt feel forced at all. evonnes friends, and the other less important characters feel like theyre really part of the story instead of just being like "oh look hi im a poc." you also dont fall trap to the trope(cliche?) of only including poc to make them evil or annoying, you have a good range and it feels realistic. however, i've noticed that u tend to use the same words for asians ("exotic")and black people(just "black") which does get a bit repetitive, especially as the other characters are described in more interesting ways. also the use of "exotic"... i dont really know if this is an important issue, but as an asian.. i do find it a bit... dehumanising. but i applaud you on your treatment of poc overall.
-you also make your settings very real and comfortable in a way that other authors fail to do. most people end up making hogwarts the only realistic setting, (i guess because its the most familiar to them) but you manage to make all your settings feel like real places, which i think is very impressive.

- ive also noticed that u objectify women a lot, and at first i thought it was like male author syndrome or something but you also seem to objectify men the same amount so yay for equality lmao. i think that it does add to the overall aesthetic and it doesnt annoy me because u do it to men as well so great
- i also think your location scene breaks are a really nice touch which makes ur fic stand out without interrupting the flow of the story.
- u also make the lady feel so mysterious and in control i just love it

I really loved this story so sad its been abandoned

Why would Tobias choose to be a whore freely? I understand that he doesn't want to go with his parents, but why doesn't he stick to robbery and other criminal acts?

What I like best about your story is that it appears realistic. There are no overpowerd characters and no bashing. The only thing witch bothered me was the Potters decision to leave Harry at a orphanage (yes I know that this is characteristic for a WBWL story but it never made sense to me) and Dumbledores decision to use Harry as a tool to strengthen his brother (without a proper introduction I always have the canon characters in my head, making their actions seem absurd out of character).

Having said that, I have to add that your writing style is very good and easily to read and the concept of switching perspectives makes the story interesting. Finally, the plot with the underground society
is very original and makes a good story.
I hope you continue writing. Well done.

Hey! I know that is has been ages since you have updated and I doubt that you will even see this review but I just have to say that the sheer decadence of your story leaves me spellbound. You are a wonderful author with the rare talent of sucking your readers into a world of intrigue, sin and hedonism and leaves them waiting impatiently for more.

I absolutely adore the way you have shaped the characters in your story. You have made every single one if them so deliciously complex and multidimensional that the mind spins trying to comprehend their various facets. Your Tobias (because let's face it, there is not one iota of Harry Potter in the boy) has been so painstakingly crafted as a product of his environment and the way his psyche has developed shows a great depth of understanding of what exactly makes the human race what it is - that desperate need for survival at all costs is what defines every single one of us so well.

Honestly, at this point I don't even mind if you don't complete this story because the world you crafted so carefully is so brilliantly fragile that the place you have left it off is good enough for me. I can easily imagine Tobias and Sirius wrecking havoc world over with Voldemort and Remus forming an alliance with them.

It is exceptionally rare to find a fic that is so richly detailed and I really must thank you for that. All the best to you for your future endeavors.

are u gonna update or wanna give it so someone can continue?

Brilliant can't wait for more I love how u created and changed the whole plot and how you've done it so amazingly it's brilliant I can't wait for more chapters and love this book and hope u update soon

your writing style is so amazing. it's so captivating! I love this story!

tbh, this is the second time I've read this and I'm still insanely confused and lost half the time with no mental capacity to keep track of everything. At the same time, I adore this every time because I freaking LOVE the atmospheric vibe of this fic. It's so high, and rave-y, everything absolutely like indulging in everything id-given desire. Can't wait to read more.

If I was in his position I would have fucking killed the lady for fucking with my life

Loved your story, but I must admit it was quite confussing at some points - why Tobias killed the man who ignited lighter, wat is Lady and was the ring the same one from the nursery?