Umm ok. This was a little strange. You've made a few mistakes too. It's Nefertiri not Napartiti. And also it's Anck-su-namun not An-ok-sun-amun. One more thing. It's called the Spear of Osiris. An Oasis is a pleasureable place. I'm trying not to make this sound like a flame but there really were quite a few mistakes in here.

Just to let you know, Evie's prievious incarnation was Nefertiri, and Anack-su-namun was to be married to Nefertiri's father, Setti(the Pharoh). Anack-su-namun was called princess, but if she hasn't committed suicide(or killed Setti), she would have been called Queen.

Oh no... another Evy fan who chooses to mindlessly diss Anck-su-namun... first of all, you need to spell the names right. It's Anck-su-namun and Nefertiri. And also, your information is way off. If you payed attention, you would have noticed that Seti calls her his FUTURE wife, not his wife. She was a concubine. And I doubt Anck had morning breath... because as a reincarnation, she has access to a toothbrush, and if in her reincarnation she has 2,000 (you were wrong again, it's 3000) year old morning breath then so would Nefertiri. And how can you really consider Alex a virgin? He hasn't even gone through puberty yet! And no, it's not that you must kill a member of the opposite sex, it's a FEMALE virgin. And you have to understand, at the time Anck lost to Nefertiri, she has Meela in her body, who probably did the fighting. And you need to lay off of Anck. What has she done to you? In my fic I make Anck and Nef equals. I speak positively about both. Well, next time, do a little more research before you write about something like this. :)

It's true, I have read much, much worse stories. It seems you were in a rush to get to the end. Emotions make a story. Even though you had lots in there, you hurried them along and pushed them all together. No parent waits for the other to wake up before contacting the police about a missing child. But you're writing and that is the main thing, we all have to start somewhere and we all stuffed up in the beginning. Keep at it, if you have the passion for it, you will learn and grow as you go.

hmmmm hmmmmmmm. this is neli, and its like the first time that i have ever reviwed one of your stories! YAY! well, this is not a flame, this is just a normal review, aren't you lucky? that story was pretty good... but it was weird reading all those kissing scenes because im like your friend and stuff and see you at school everyday... Anywho, i also just read your lil biography blurb you have. and i toally disapprove of 'if you're a hott girl e-mail me'. it makes you sound like an ass ans nobody will like you! ahahhaahaaa! so you better change it and make it that you like playing the basson or that you have an awesomely cool friend named neli or something. hmmm... back to the story. haha do you know that this story could not have existed without me! it took you to see the movie! hehehe. well im obviously winning the Longest Review Award here, but i know you like it. the story flowed nicely, and i liked how you went in depth of the character's personalities and minds. haha, i noticed how you used the british spelling when you said 'mum', instead of 'mom'. quite nice fighting scene, too. well, i think thats enough for now, so tata, ~neli~

Cute!

i really, really, REALLY like this story...they should make a sequel to "The Mummy Returns" out of it. :)

Pretty good.

Kool storie. I really liked it! Write more about it!

Ok... I guess it wasn't that bad. It wasn't that great, though, either. For one thing, it's Anck-Su-Namun (I think). Also, try to write with a lot more detail! This could have been a good story, but you rushed through important parts. Not terrible, though! I've definately read worse! _~

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This was good... I thikn you should continue writting.

sorry, honey, but so many parts of that story were unneeded or stupid. try to work on the plot more.

Interesting take****Mandy K.