Fuuuuuuuucutacka shrooom Harry is being mind controlled by ginny why would you do this every thing he dose seems like he is on love potion I mean giving control of his vaults, why showing her his secret war room ...WHY?

Please update this story, I loved it so far

okay, first of, its not Raydan, but rather, it is Raiden!

So he is a murderer and a rapist, I think this is going to be hard to him redeemed.

plz write more

Just favouriting it

this very good

Kaito is hungry to eat

that... well honestly i think it sucked, cool action, start was ok, but i don't understand why everyone just has to have their characters fall in live in seconds, omg i saw u and knew, just isn't, lol believable.

the whole i had to have u so thats why i raped you... wow, it needs work, keep it up, hopfully others leave better responses then me.

This story reminds me too much of Carl Rae Jepsen's song "Call Me Maybe".

Change up the lyrics, and here;

Hey, I just kidnapped you,
And this is crazy,
But here's my penis,
So f$%& me, maybe?.

That is your whole chapter summarized. But let's hit a few notes here...

First off your paragraphs. There is more to a story than seeing how much information we can shove into a tight knit paragraph. Space it out a bit.

Secondly, Grammar. I know I am not the shining star of grammar, but wow.

Thirdly, Flow. Your story jumps a tad off base, with no true follow-up. Point A, meet point C.

Fourth,... Your character reading needs work. Ginny goes from being afraid, to loving the fact that "Rayden" was inside her.

There is more, but honestly,... yeah. Good premise at the very least, but take out the trash and spiff it up a bit.

once again another great chapter. loved the action. GO HARRY...eh KIT or wharever lol

SAIYAN BOOYA! Harry finally knows what he really is that is so awsome!

ALL HAIL THE KING OF THE TABLE! lol great chapter.

once again it was very good. glad to see Ginny and Harry have finally found one another again. good job.

okay chapter, I foud the new prophecy a bit long and wordy but I have a feeling that you have a plan so I'll stick with it. good job

another very good chapter. the few Harry Potter/DBZ crossovers I've seen were choppy at best but you have really done well with this one so far. good job.