Content is satisfactory. Did you want me to elaborate on that or the editing? I also have a story called 'The Esper World' up. Did you want to read it?

I beg you, make a sequel. OR ADD ANOTHER CHAPTER OR SOMETHING!

Cuz I wanna see Sonic's reaction.

8D

i'd love for a sequel to this.

i also want to say damn sonic has to be VERY pissed off now

Wow... great story. I wasn't expecting the ending, but at the same time I was, y'know? Really good story... just a little confused as to who did what (was it Antione or Snively or someone else... and, was there a secret deal between Antione and Snively or between one of them and someone else) with infecting the King and the rest of the Kingdom. But, I can see why you did it this way... instead of laying it all out for the reader, you leave it up to the reader to decide who did the deed.

Anyways, great story... would like to see a sequel to this one and see how they get out of this one (if they do at all).

Keep up the good work, Outcasts!

And... if you have the time and really want to check out my idea of a long story... check out either one of my stories on here. I'm always open to reviews (good or bad).

(the same review I put up on Devart)

I always said it would have been better if they had allowed the Evil-Antoine / Sally wedding to actually end with their union. Not out of any malice to Sally, as I do quite like her, but out of the need in the comic for a dimensional villain - one that isn't cookie cutter, one that can be taken seriously, and handled differently. Having a corrupt or antagonistic King as the head of the FF cause, and juxtaposing that with Sally as a powerless Queen (a golden opportunity for character development), could've actually been interesting; the poor plot points leading up to it cast under the rug. The whole thing could've ended, much later, with her poisoning him, leaving us with a deliciously ethically ambiguous resolution to the situation...

Oh well.

Your writing, actually, is of higher quality than I've seen in this genre for some time (most good stuff I get off the FFML now, and that's mostly anime-based or original). The only real staunch criticism I can offer on such a nice piece is the lack, at parts, of more descriptive narrative and character actions. But I have a strong natural inclination towards legnthy pieces of writing and story telling.

That, was wonderful. Oh wow, how I wish Archie had done something like this. I wasn't able to find any mistakes at all in this, and you had the chapter going at a perfect pace as well. ;) Keep it up, Outcasts!

I'm a SatAM and Archie fan, so I can really appreciate what you're doing here. I really enjoy your writing style: little to no punctuation or spelling errors, excellent vocabulary, etc. And you know how to tell a story. Keep up the good work. As seeing as you like Archie, you might wanna mosey on over to my work entitked "The Mobian Agenda." Cheers.

-TVR