Great Job!
Characters were done very well
POV was sometimes hard to figure out at first but always became clear
Character interactions made this fic a winner
Excellent!

whoa. aximli's really lashing out.

thank you for writing this! i love post war fics, although i wish you'd include more scenes between alloran and the animorphs

Beautifully written. I hope some day you'll complete this!

WOW! This story is truly epic. I love how in character you've kept everyone, and this last chapter with Esplin and Alloran's interaction was especially interesting. If you ever end up working on this fic again, I would love to read more!

"Amongst the humans, there are jokes about such things, about hearing voices in one's head, but an Andalite is never far from mental whispers."

Excellent observation.
Tobias is so... so appropriately bitter through all of this, and the abruptness of the dialogue makes it feel more realistic, at least to me. Talking to the host of Visser Three is obviously an ordeal for Tobias.

It's also interesting to see how Loren and Rachel have changed Alloran's conservative ideas about female warriors.

This is fantastic. Alloran's wariness of "the nothlit" and Ax's reaction to the news about Elfangor are particularly well done, but Alloran's fragmented memories of TAC are the best part of these two chapters.

I adore this story. It's so rare to find good multichapter Anific, much less centered on the characters you've chosen.

Alloran is portrayed magnificently here - the same strong but weary prince from the last book. Not weak, but aware of his mistakes and humbled by them, and very much aware of what others think of him.

The other Andalites and their culture are written excellently as well. I love the small details you weave in like when Alloran observes the humans panting as they run up to him, and the prejudices that Andalites have toward Toby and a morph-capable nothlit, etc.

Arbron is an intrigue. I really enjoy his sharp personality and how he's never given up, and is still fighting for a race that is not really his own. I was just wondering though when Ax attacked him and drew blood, wouldn't Arbron get hungry? Or is he that well-controlled?

The real wow moment came at the end of chapter 7 when Esplin said, "Brother?" That was a masterpiece of complexity in one word. Hats off.

Look forward to more, whenever you have time to update.

Cantare

ah i love this story ... are you ever going to continue? you can't just leave it at that :(

his looks like it would be a good story except for one thing.

essenially everything in thoughtspeak is missing.

like in this little peice of it

We had traveled in my ship, my Jahar, each thoroughly tired of the others before the first day was out. There was a mission - a slow mission. We were to drift toward the planet Earth at sub-relativistic speeds to return the humans to their home. But we didn’t; we didn’t, and Arbron was lost, Arbron and the other aristh, the one I sometimes dreamt had been Elfangor.

Aximili was staring at me now with his main eyes, his stalks scanning the trees around us. It was deeply ingrained paranoia that made him do that, something neither of the arisths had had. I started to tell him of this, but he interrupted, prompting,

This echo of my own thoughts startled me. Had I spoken aloud? It had been so long since I had had control over anything that I suspected I occasionally did voice my thoughts uncensored; Esplin had, of course, never let any words leave my head but those he had dictated, and I had fallen out of the habit of conversation. Even when I was free of him, it did not matter how loudly I screamed or how subversively I whispered, for my voice was contained within a device Esplin claimed was of his own making, and died unheard. For a brief time, I had been able to converse after a fashion with the psychic Leerans, unfettered by Esplin's grip on my voice, but that was long ago.

I repeated cautiously, testing the name against my memories of the Andalite, and of the aristh.

Aximili looked incredulous, and no wonder; the shame he believed I had admitted to was great. One did not simply forget a name, a name given by tradition stronger than law. The second and third names might be dropped by friends, or in conversation, but to simply forget was anathema. He paused, then nodded. like?

His use of the humans' expression - a nod and the all-encompassing "okay" - surprised me. Had he even noticed, or was it so ingrained in him as to pass out of his mind without thought? I wondered anew if there was any hope for Aximili's plans to return to the homeworld. Even to one who had lived with an alien in his head for so many years, he seemed at times incredibly foreign. Aximili was not human, of course, but neither was he any longer wholly Andalite.

I insisted, feeling suddenly that it was very important for someone to understand. Aximili was no longer fully Andalite, yet was I either, at that?

Aximili interrupted harshly.

I replied in a similar tone, ignoring Aximili's flinch of surprise.

I can barely understand i because what their actually saying is missing. Is that done on porpouse?

This is so good, but it's KILLING me that the dialogue is largely missing. Is there anywhere else that I can read it?

I really like this! Alloran always interested me as a character, and it's fascinating to read from his POV.

However, it looks like you've lost some dialogue, I assume because of FFnet's formatting rules. Is there any chance you can edit it back in?

wow, this is really really good. please keep writing it.

I don't think that I ever reviewed this, and I'm surprised. I really like this story, and I'm glad that someone picked up the story with Alloran. He's the most curious character in the story, I think. And my favorite one because there's really a lot to write about him, since he was there from beginning to end.

Ooh very nice. I always love bits from Esplin's pov. He's such an interesting character. Great work. I love the misunderstanding with Alloran about Loren and Rachel.

-T.