Hi there. How are you? The only thing that is missing is longer chapters. Other than that great story.

Hi I'm here to review your story. Imho I would say this story is a bit confusing to me atm and I would like to give some pieces of advice that you must improved it, too many chapters hence in every chapter there's always a short story and it's a tiring one to read. If you could only make it longer. I'm not here to insult you or whatsoever, I'm here to enlighten you to make yourself a better writer my dear. You should practice more. I apologize if its too long I meant no harm and I don't bite, I only bite food :)

just when it was getting good it was abandend :(

Love this plot so far, but I can't get over the overuse of the adjective "silkily". Perhaps find different adjectives to describe Severus's voice?

So I just found this story, and finished reading it. You have not updated in forever, but I hope you decide to do so soon! The story can definitely not end this way.

I got a suggestion, have him place her under the truth serum where she'll say no to the working for the order and admits that Dan was a spy for the Ministry and she had defended her self from him and she was hiding from the Ministry in order to protect their son. And that certain order members were helping her because they care for her not because she works for them, she could careless who won the war. She can also tell him she was pretending to be a Weasel to hide from the Ministry, you know distant consent. He could then go back to view the memories as she was trying to show him the truth as she honestly does love him. Just hide the Fact that she is working fort he order.

Also, I suggest a beta Reader for your grammar mistakes they are few and hard to find but they are there.

plz post again I like this.

You haven't updated in years! And you said you wouldn't 't abandon it! Otherwise I love this story and wish you would update :)
Sassyluv xxx

Please, please come back and update this story!
It's a great story and I really hope you come back soon.

This is a great story, so I ask, beg, please come back and update this story.

This is a great story pls update soon!

Please keep on writing! I'm dying to read the next chapter!

Since you say your not abandoning this story, I'm going to be keeping watch

Update soon plz!

Loving this one :) is there anymore?

Hi!

I really enjoyed reading your work! It is amazing!

You are really gifted! :]

I would like to read the end... so I'm wondering if you're planning to end the story because it is amazing!

Have fun!

P.S. Sorry for my bad English.

-Eva

I can't believe you've stopped writing this fic! [ It was so good. Please update!