You were right about rare. I never read a Takimi fanfiction. But I like how unique you are in your story. I did think Hikari should have been a little sweeter, but I still want you to continue.

~Joe and Izzy

yay! well written

i'm longing to read more

shadows

You know, Sora might want to know that her boyfriend is dating her best friend. Of course when Yamato snaps from the stress of having to pay attention to her CONSTANTLY and strangles her, she might notice then...

Mimi is incredibly high maintenance as a girlfriend. Yamato would not be interested in paying that price. He has been shown CANONICALLY in being more interested in the INdependent type who can survive her boyfriend not dancing attendance on her all the time.

Mimi also needs someone with a lot of patience. THat isn't something Yamato has.

REAL romance pays attention to the characters' personalities, not just who looks attractive with who.

Hikari and Miyako are wildly out of character as well. Hikari is a quiet, gentle kind of person. Miyako is a stronger, more forceful type. They wouldn't be acting like this even if they *did* like the same kind of person. Making them identical screeching harpies just so Takeru is revolted by their presence is an insult to all three of them.

Takeru's no prize in this, either. He acts more like a stuck up little brat than the proper Child of Hope. "Oh, please, girls, don't fight over *me*, not like all those other common girls who adore me." That's the attitude he's got. And frankly, who CARES if he's popular? What does that have to do with what kind of a PERSON he is? I haven't seen anything that would make me believe ANY of the three of them would care about him in the slightest.

This is just bland, meaningless froth. Extremely boring.

I'm actually a huge Mimato fan as well, but I do like the idea of Mimi and T.K. together.

so far your story is really interesting, and I'm definitely looking forward to your next chapter.

Wow, i don't think i've ever heard of a Takimi. I'm mostly for Takari, but hey, sounds interesting! :D Haha though, kinda funny, Yolei likes T.K.! XD

... Hope to read the next chapter. )