I think it would've been better ending with "Where is he! I have business to take care of with him!" rather than him questioning is awareness of Naraku (sorry if I misspelled it). I feel like your stories teach me more about this fandom than the minimal research I do on them xD

Lol nice persuasive addition at the end. And yes, this chapter does lead us wondering these questions without directly having them said. I'm starting to see the similarities in the stories :)

Interesting cliffhanger XD ah, so I see you're writing style's always been unique, just polished up over the years. I already see the differences in characterizations. Not bad. Though it's pointless to say so since this is older a few grammar errors but no problem!

Aw I hope you continue your story sometime soon. I enjoyed it, just read the whole thing. ]

Now don't take any of this the wrong way. I just feel like I ned to speak up. Ok, first off, try explaining some more of the first few chapters. Why and how exactly did Serena die by Naraku? And what about the other 3 inner scouts? It'd probably be more interesting if Inuyasha and his friends actually came up with a plan to stop Naraku, instead of sitting down all day? And why exactly is Mars wanted dead? This story just needs more explanations and details. And I know you already pointed out that you rushed, just stay away from that too.

i think its sad how he has to kill her. but its a good plot. keep it up

The fight scene wasn't that bad. Disorienting at times, but I can't see why you said this particular chapter was poorly written over on Youtube. Regardless, aside from a possible Mistress 9 revival (yay! _), there weren't too many plot twists...aside from the end. So Kagura is backstabbing Naraku? I think I get that. Well, at least Kagura will be working for a better villain. :P

So far so good, and I'm intrigued to see how everyone will proceed without their memories of...whatever it was that was erased. _

Interesting, although the ending was a bit disorienting. I must say, though, that while I did like most of the plot twists, Haruka and Michiru won't be lesbian lovers? Man, that's a shame. They're my favorite pairing, so it is something of a disappointment for me...

Sorry it took so long to set up a review! _

Anyway, once again, similar grammar distractions from the last story, but this one also is vastly superior in regards to character development and plot! Pretty good! _ My only comment is that Hiei seems...way too out of character for the moment. I'm sure there's a reason for it, but...

Interesting plot turns. _ Pluto and Hotaru appearing? I will admit that Setsuna's slip up and personality seems strangely out of character for her, but, other than that, I applaud how you mostly kept everyone in character (Rei is acting a tad too light hearted at times, but...)

Grammar and sentence structure, once again, feels iffy. There are several awkwardly structured sentences that really throw off the story. However, the plot balances this out.

Ch 2, I noticed, was written nearly four years ago, so naturally your craft has improved greatly since then. While hte plot is compelling and most of the characters are completely in character (save, maybe, for Rei, who seems a little more humble and a lot more focused), the grammer and expressions used do throw off the pacing, making some parts difficult to read. While the meaning and intention was never lost, it's just a lot of parts are really awkwardly written.

Once again, seeing as how you wrote this several years ago, I doubt that your craft has remained the same and I'm sure you've improved greatly since then.

Alright, so far we have an interesting premise. The characters feel developed and distinct, mostly in character, but they're a few things that do irk me so far. Specifically, some grammatical errors do interrupt the pacing of the story, which threw me off a little bit. Additionally, the whole thing about Rei's father was surprising. Did they mention that in the live action series? I can't remember it in the manga or anime. And why did the grandfather die? Additionally, you repeat a lot of the same words over and over again, which did feel listy.

However, like I said before, the plot in and of itself seems to have potential. I think it's too early to tell whether you want Rei to end up with Kurama, but the idea does appeal. _ I also like how you connected three seperate series, SM, YYH, and Inuyasha, all together, which was rather cool, IMO. Additionally, I wonder if you're going to add any additional series into the mix. I can almost see someone completely random, like Tohru Honda, popping out of the woodworks.

Sorry, about the typo in my list comet please forgive me. I was just so happy that your fic is back.

I have highly enjoyed your up-date. I had to go back and re-read some of it because I forgot where I left off. But it still highly enjoyed it. I hope you write more soon. I love ready good Rei fics.

lol..."you're the fakest fake of the fakes of them all" was pretty funny. I couldn't help laughing, despite how serious he was about it. you get points on comedic timing. :D

As for the rest of the chapter...your writing has improved! Nice work! It was very interesting. It's nice to finally see what comes next after all these years. hehehe. Nice way to leave on a cliffy. What's going to happen now to these star-crossed lovers? ah well, I guess we'll have to see.