loved it

this is an interesting story. I've often been rather disappointed by others' forays into the Seas-as-master/mistress plot category, since they tend to make Seras give th eperson a choice, which to my mind does not really match her bumbling characterization at all. The badly-mistaken but well-intended turning of young Alex, coupled with the "real-world-ish" actionsconsequences result, make this story more believable (for me, anyway) than others.

However (lol, sorry, but there's always a "but."), you might want to proof this a bit, and check the names of the weapons to be sure you have them correct...

1. Seras' sniper rifle in the first chapter had an unfamiliar name which might be a garbled version of its real name; if you came up with that name, fine, but if not, you might want to check to be sure that you spelled it correctly.

2. Alex's Large, new Crossbow: Unless its the marketer's or teh artisan's name for the weapon, "arblast" ought to be "arbalest."

There are/were several different names for crossbows, all referringto their relative size - but those names mostly escape me just now. A book such as _Weapons and Armor_ or _Arms and Armor_ can supply you with those names for the weapons.

3. Alucard's chrome-colored pistol is the .454 Cassull - not Callas. By the way, the name refers to the cartridge used, not the actual name of the model of gun. In contrast, the Jackal (Alucard's other firearm) is apparently the actual name of that gun.

This was very good. I don't read alot of Helsing but I can see this going in the cartoon. Well done.

This is an excellent fanfic, i really enjoy your writing. I'll be faithfull until the end on this one. Bravo

Nice one, Seras. Really pissed off Alucard this time.

Really nice story.

I'm eager to read more.

Good work.

You're my idol! I never quite stopped to consider to write too much according to what I want it to be like. You incorporate your new chars. well. I respect that a lot. Very good form.

great story thus far i like the whole new gen. of hunters and enemies

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Good stuff. Nice pacing. Keep it up.

It's almost just like her situation. And the twist... Brilliant! It's been added to my favorite stories list like a few others. Keep it up!

Nice.I like it a soon.

Oh! Seras gets to kick ass on her own! Yay! I would reccomend working on your word usage though. You spell things right, you just use the wrong forms.

Ex.) Weather - Whether