Very good work. You said you were depicting a clash between her inner genius and bad girl persona, which is what was happening. However I don't think she would vent so much to Mr. Simmons about her inner clashing. What we said didn't sound like something she would say (maybe feel but not say). Her words were more appropriate until the last few paragraphs. She would be more closed off and secretive, especially after having her trust broken by Mr. Simmons. She would be more angry I think because usually it's in her nature to deny her inner feelings that compete with her bad girl persona (at least verbally). It could have been better if you included her thoughts as the clash of her persona and inner self and depicted how that correlates to what she says; give a sort of outlook into her psyche. Helga has a very complex character and I think her inner thoughts vary from comprehension though so your fanfic probably seems accurate to many people and yourself. (Not that I'm criticizing you for thinking that way). The characters in the show were created so the viewer has to try to think from the perspective of those involved in the situation. Most fanfics have unique differences between the characters that are all accurate to an extent to the show. I'm not saying my comprehension is the only one thats right. I'm just giving my opinion so you can use it if you want to better yourself and your work. You'r work is excellent in my opinion despite what else I said. It just (like all works) can be changed and bettered. I wish you a happiness through all affairs.
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Please don't insult yourself by downplaying this. I've never seen a more accurate depiction of Helga portrayed so poignantly in such a simple setting. This story is wonderful.

I loved it. :)

Exllcent fic here

Great story. But how does know about Helga's poems? Do you know what episode? Oh well. Thanks for writing this; I really enjoyed reading it. :)

P.S. And you're right; Helga doesn't sound like a fourth-grader at all with her huge vocabulary and whatnot. Oh well.

Good story. I liked this story. I did remember Helga always wrote about Arnold in the show. I've never heard of the word virago though. A new word on me.

very good.

It'sa nice little one shot. Acknowledging Helga's briallance is thoughtful. I think Mr. Simmons is aware of it as well, if you recall the episode 'Helga's Love Potion', he said that 'getting to know you, Helga, through your writing has been one of the best parts of my teacxhing career." Soemthing lkike that atleast, so I think he knows who 'anonymous' is. I'd like to see more of your stories later ;)

*lifts eyebrows* Very, very intelligent work. I like the way you describe Helga through Mr. Simmons' eyes. He sees through her shell, but then, there's always a new shell building underneath. Helga seems very, very mature, but I think that's how she is in her soul, she's got this... air of wiseness before her time. Anyway, it was beautiful.

P.S. I love the word virago. I've never heard it before, but it's a perfect match for Helga G.

A very original story, and very well written. You captured the two completely different sides to Helga perfectly. Well done. -Sky.

An excellent story, Helga doesn't sound like a fourth grader but then neither does Phoebe, so we can assume that Phoebe rubbed off on Helga, it happens.

If I remember right, many of Helga's poems did say anonymous but also had her name in the corner of the page, after all it was a writing assignment, most likely graded and she wouldnt want to fail, but adding anonymous kept her status as a tough bully. She knew Mr Simmons would respect her need for privacy.

Well done though, this story was a nice glimpse into a subject most people seem to ignore.

Nicely done. Helga sounded just fine if you ask me, she may not have sounded like a fourth-grader, but she sounded like herself, and that's what counts. It's great plot you've come up with here, one I haven't seen very often, at least not as well developed as this.

I certainly hope you have more HA stories in the works, the fandom is in dire need of writers like you.

This was very well written, kudos to you. You did a very good job not only with the portrayal of Helga's character, but with the dilemma Mr. Simmons would face as her teacher. Character driven writing has a habit of being very strong.

Just two things I felt the need to mention. Mr. Simmons does indeed know that Helga submits her writings as Anonymous. In one of the episodes, I think it was "Helga's Love Potion," Mr. Simmons is reading one of Helga's poems to the class. He states that the author chooses to remain anonymous. Under the title of the poem, it does say "anonymous," however, since it was a school assignment, the name Helga Pataki is in the upper right hand corner, and it's very clear. Also, in "The Aptitude Test," Simmons goes on and on about how gifted Helga is. He knows that she's her most exceptional student creatively.

The other thing is just a small correction. Mr. Simmons never had Olga Pataki as a student. Olga had Mrs. Slovak. Simmons, did, however, get to have Olga in his class as a student teacher, so he has at least met the living legend.

Again, congratulations on such a well-written story. You're a talented individual. I hope that you'll bring more to the fandom in the future. Best of luck to you!

That was really goog. I liked it. It gave a new look on Helga, and that she said what her inspiration was for her poems, even thought she didn't give the exact reason. Well I reallet enjoyed this story and keep up the good writing.

Wonderful story. Helga is right; all her passion comes from the ones around her. Remember the episode when she tried to stop loving Arnold by drinking a potion? She was almost a zombie! Helga needs Arnold as much as air, and Phoebe is like her right arm as well.

Keep the good writing.