And here I was looking for some Murtagh and Thorn fluff.
but damn is this engrossing~

Slowwww down.

Nasuada and Murtagh are a thing...not these peasant chicks.

I liked the style. But no.

I think it's moving just fine...I mean it took Eragon several chapters to get out of Carvahall anyway so...

Galbatorix seems a bit more pissy here. Granted he is, you know, insane...so that's not really surprising...idk just voicing my thoughts :P

Good job again :)

Paolini never actually said anyone's true name in the books. I kinda liked that way of making them more vague and mysterious. It made it seem like even the author wasn't skilled enough to come up with a phrase in any language that fully captivated the essence of one of their characters.

Other than that, pretty good :)

Solid start, but the Twins are a little more powerful than I remember...haven't read the series in a while so I could be wrong

Good job xD

Nice start! :)
I like the details this chapter has to offer in Murtaugh's POV. I'm interested.

Hmmmm
This is very interesting...
I don't really have much to say about this... other than it is...
AWESOME!

OK I will review, gladly!
This is a very interesting; unique story. I like it so far; but I personally would prefer to see some torture, only because I am a dark soul. But its good so far. :DDDD

LOVE IT!

wow you're really good...(not sarcastic)

I love your story! I read it a couple of years ago then stopped reading inheretence fanfiction. Then I started thinking about your story and how great it was, and I really wanted to reread it. So I spent a long time looking for it whenever I had time, clicking on stories I thought it might be. After a few weeks, I found it! Your story is like at the end of the murtagh fanfiction list! Sorry for boring you with my review...

Anyhow, I reread it, and it was even better than it was when I first read it! I love your characters, (especially Gen) and want to tell you I think you're a great author!

Wow! You are amazing! Good idea, with the ancient language. I probably would have just made up some words :/

Good. There. I said it, bossy. May I go back to reading now? Just kidding. I'm trying to reform my ways, but it's hard. The Ghost Who Walks (who shall henceforth be called TGWW) likes your story. And your humor. Good night, who couldn't love Daymarket's randomness? Human skin coat, huh? It would probably be like fine leather (yes, I'm morbid. Get over it).

Wow.

That was my first thought after closing my laptop last night after finishing reading your fanfic.

I think, if there is anyone who should write about Murtaghs time before the burning plains, it is you. You really did him and Thorn justice, and also Galbatorix is just as cruel but cunning and elegant as he would be i think in Paolinis books.

I really respect all the work, thought and imagination not to mention hard friggin work you put into this fanfic! And i admire you for it, it really is an unbelievable read.

Of course as humans are, we wish to know more and are basically never satisfied.

I wish, and hope that someday you will write about Murtaghs return from the Burning plains to Urubaen.

For if someone should write it and make its story justice, its you im sure.

Thank you for several hours and days wonderfull read.

:) Great work

I admire your use of the ancient language, even if you or others find it incorrect i really like that you used it. It needs to be used to make the story so real. Besides your writing is exeptionally good, its like jumping into Christopher Paolinis books. Like a comforting continuation of how things went on for Murtagh. Indeed you deserve allot of praise for this, im sure i will send more reviews with each chapter i pass.

I look forward to reading the rest of the chapters!

Thank you!