It’s mad till this day I come back to re-read this story over the past few years, even Exiled. I used to read those two since I was 14, now I’m 20 *sigh* I live like Evian with Dylan’s mentality, the combo sucks.
Anyways, I have to say you really know how to portray a bitchy character, especially Hilary. God, she really pissed me off... even I was angry for Evian. But I do love the character development, it’s realistic, it’s not abrupt like some stories on here where all of sudden he notices her and he’s madly in love immediately. Which is why I love the little scenes with Kai and Evian, I really do hope they get more time and I really wish Evian had a fcukboy detector because Pierre is definitely one of them, along with Brooklyn. The cliffhanger you left us on is heart breaking :’) just when it got juicier now that Evian is showing some development, I hope her beyblading takes a good turn too. Using electricity as her element was smart, she’s going to be protecting Tala and Kai, heck she can even use her beyblade to shock or electrify her assailants. I can’t wait for her to whoop Hilary’s ass in a battle too.
I do hope to see an update whenever that’ll be... but I get it, life happens and then shit follows.
Ending off, I hope you’re all good! Take care. X

Please update it

Hey when are you gonna update! Just do it fast! Coz' I'm dying to read the next chapter! Please! Please! Pretty please with cream on top! Please update!

yaaaaaay! so i finally learned the "dirty little secret!"
and the little note asked for a bad boyfriend story..well, i have one.

so i dated this guy on and off for nearly three years, right? we met in my freshman year of high school and he had the biggest crush on me. i thought he was OK at the time..you know when you find someone somewhat attractive but it's not enough to date them? yeah, like that.
so we remained friends during high school and after i graduated in 2010, him and i lost touch til like the end of 2011? we started hanging out and talking again and we hooked up for new years at the end of that year and had sex and it was like..the best sex i had ever had. so you can imagine, i was like..yipeeeee! it's not often that a guy knew how to make me cum from just fucking so girlllll YOU KNOW I WAS EXCITED! lmao
so we start dating, right? my parents are pissed because after the crappy semester i had in college (that i told you about in my last review) they're all "omg you have to focus on school blahblah) and i was like, ok i'm 20 years old, YOU CANT TELL ME WHAT TO DO ANYMORE. so i moved out and lived with the guy.
biggest
mistake
EVER.
first of all, i didn't realize how good i actually had it til i left my house.
home cooked meals, not having to pay bills, being basically SPOILED.
so being on my own was hard as fuck...and i live in new york
and moved to manhattan..now you KNOW living there is pricey!

also, when you live with someone you date, there isn't much that they can hide from you. everything is on the surface because you're with the person ALL THE TIME. so things seemed peachy and he seemed completely normal all the years i knew him. after all, i only spent a certain amount of time with him whenever we hung out. but after sleeping & waking up to this man every single day, i learned that he was a pathological liar, a kleptomaniac and basically bat shit fucking crazy. i'm considered "clinically" bipolar and even i was not that crazy. like girl..he was so shady..we shared a lot of the same mutual friends because we went to high school together and when they came to visit us, he would steal money from them and lie about it..or just go into stores while we were shopping and buy stuff and secretly steal without me knowing until after we got out. and stole gifts and things from people and tried to pass them off as gifts to me. when we would fight, he would go out and steal stuff as a means of coping with his anger/sadness. it was SICK.
i lost a lot of friends over the years because of his crap. he didn't take care of himself, would smoke weed all of the time and was just extremely emotionally and (sometimes) physically abusive and proved to be extremely detrimental to my health.
what's worse is i actually thought once upon a time in my naive mind that we were "in love" and that he was "the one".
yeah right!
but the thing about a bad relationship is that..it is a huge reflection of one's self. i realized my self esteem and self love was not 100% and that is the reason why i made excuses for this person's shitty ways/behavior and put up with it for so long.
so now we don't talk at all. his number & social media is blocked completely and i am the happiest i have ever been without him around.

basically - AINT NOBODY GOT TIME FOR THAT!

there goes my bad boyfriend story. c:

/endrant

sorry that was so long omg

lol the ending to this was priceless.
and girl, you are like my spirit animal *_*
i read your little note about school/college...same shit happened to me, too. i spent my first semester getting shitfaced drunk, smoking too much weed, not completing my work on time..i fell behind like after the second or third week of classes. my roommate was a cunt, i had sex and got pregnant, dropped acid for the first time, had an abortion..._ i'm literally the posterchild for fuck ups, tbh. but OH WELL.
shit happens, life happens. things change, we change, everything changes.
but somehow, in the end, the universe always works towards achieving synchronicity and that perfect balance..meaning, everything tends to work itself out in the end.
so i don't stress shit! :3

okay..i'll quit getting too up close and personal in this review, lmao.
now i'm going on tangents and you're probably reading this like,
who the hell is tryptamine and WHY is she talking to herself in my reviews? LOL

hey,
I remember reading somewhere..it may have been in this story or Exiled? You said DLS was kinda like your diary...that a lot of the things you wrote about in this fic related to your real life. I relate to Evian's character a lot, with how she beats herself up when she fails..how she always feels like she's in her brother's shadow (even though she's older!). My brother and I are 2 years apart..(not two minutes, like ev and tala!) so for me, when I was younger, I was like..the star of the show! the "cool big sis" lmao and when i got older, the roles reversed and my brother became the overachiever. i was the one who was always getting into trouble, skipping classes, doing poorly in school, getting grounded, etc.
Evian's a rebel..but seriously, didn't everyone live on the edge when they were seventeen? i mean, isn't that what we're supposed to do?
how the hell else are we gonna learn those "important life lessons"? I used to think my parents were strict b/c they're jamaican..but i think parents tend to worry about their little girls more? IDK.
okaaay, i'm rambling now, lmao.
but i really thought about all of that when i read this line in this chapter: "Being seventeen meant you were just a baby; there was no possible way of getting involved with such disturbing and complex situations". I know you were being sarcastic when you said that, lmao. I just had to tell ya!

and im glad she finally got her bit-beast, it's about time! lol!

I had to laugh at the part of Ray saying Kai was gonna give him a sponge bath..wouldn't everyone LOVE to see that? ;D
It's interesting you say Evian is a lot like you..do you have a twin? I believe I read in one of your after-story comments that you had a younger brother, right? Either way, I love the way you depict the sister/brother relationship, it's very dead on! :) I wonder if Kai's snide comments was Ray's idea..or if he is planning something else to get Evian to be more competitive?

I feel so bad laughing at Evian during her beybattle..lmao. I was rooting for the underdog, hoping she would somehow create a miracle and that her beyblade would start spinning again or some crazy shit.

And woooooow. The tension in that parking lot was intense, lol. I love that Evian was the loser and the joke during the match BUT managed to be the hero and saved Kai and Tala from the evil Boris!

I saw that you told someone there would be a sequel to this..and I'm not sure if you plan on finishing this fic anymore but I hope you plan to, someday. I'm still reading it until the end because I love your work and I admire your style. You're VERY good at depicting scenes/drama! :3

I'm still interested in what your writing process is like...like how do you prepare yourself before writing a chapter? Do you listen to music or go somewhere where its completely quiet? And with editing, how long do you go over a draft before submitting? Sorry for all the questions, I am GENUINELY curious LOL. PM me in response if you happen to read this, please. c:

I'm asking mainly because I have lots of ideas for Bloodlines & I've been having such a difficult time in depicting the point of view for my characters..and I dont want to write in that "KAI'S POV".."HILARYS POV" format..I think it's pretty tacky, Idk.
Not bashing it or anything, I've just never been a fan of that. _

But uhmuhm..yeah, I'll quit rambling and going off on tangents in this review now..I'm only on Chapter 18 and still have a way to go!

:D

I'm loving that Mr. Brooklyn made an appearance. :3 Smooooooth!
And I really thought Evian would join their team..idk. Fuck Tala for not having her back, he needs to grow a pair and quit being so indifferent. He should know his sister wouldn't steal from anyone!

Lol I wanna strangle Hilary in the anime and even more in this fic. In response to what you wrote, your story is not dragging!
*whispers* FUCK WHAT ANYONE SAYS *end whisper* LOL
You focus on character development and it's wonderful! I like long stories..it's a dying thing because a lot of people on here tend to write one-shots and poorly written fics..you actually put in a lot of effort and it's awesome!
Brooklyn is a ruthless motherfucker but something tells me he probably wouldn't kill Evian..if he wanted to, he would have already!

BROOKLYN! Fuck what I said in the last review...Brooklyn can capture me anytime.. :) I hope they don't leave Evian behind..I think she's going to be in worse shape when they're gone. And why the hell isn't she beyblading with her three hundred dollar beyblade? THAT GIRL NEEDS TO GET IT TOGETHER LOL

o m g that clown jerk had better not hurt Evian!
And I remember watching House of Wax years ago..it was so corny, lol. Horror movies seriously make me laugh. I think the only horror film that really spooked the crap out of me was Insidious and I watched it at the movie theater with my ex and we were both high as fuck so I was screaming in the theater like a little bitch lmao

I hope Evian loosens up a bit as the chapters go on..she's a size two, her figure looks fiiiiine! She could've certainly had a beer or two. And Kai having a thing for blondes? MHMMMMM! :D

I find myself giggling like a baby reading this especially when Evian introduces herself and says "I TOTALLY DISAGREE WITH CAMERON DIAZ, WHOEVER THINKS ORANGE IS THE NEW PINK IS SRSLY DISTURBED". I'm feeling like total shit cause I got my period today and we both know how that goes..so thank you for giving me a much needed laugh. :3

okay the cashier seemed like he would have tried to swindle Evian if Tala wasn't there.
he asks Tala, "how much do you have?"
seriously? it reminds me of those boutique shop keepers in new york around st marks place,
where they sell all the dildos and weed pipes and do piercings/tattoos LOL _ you have to haggle and hustle you way into getting what you want for a good price.
and three hundo for a beyblade? whaaaaaaaaaat

i know you plant seeds in your stories so i'm jittery about what the significance was of Evian and that encounter with the girl in the bathroom as well as with the thumping shes hearing/the dreams she's been having..i'm sure it's her bit-beast but i wonder..is it a bitbeast that could hurt tala?
maybe i'm reaching again, idk! but if she is meant to get a bit-beast, that would explain her sudden interest in the sport..why she has an interest she can't even explain to herself.
AND WHO THE FUCK IS BEHIND HER IN THE BASEMENT OMG

I know the stories are different but this Tala in DLS is toned down and sweet..unlike Exiled Tala who is a bad ass, foul mouthed beyblader with a fiery temper. I remember reading on your profile that there are similarities in Evian and Dylan but Evian is certainly more passive aggressive whereas Dylan is merciless when it comes to filtering her thoughts. Dylan would have checked the shit out of Hilary comparing her to an "Ashley" whereas Evian is taking a more subtle approach. I think her way of getting back at Hilary is by taking on that 'Tyson' personality..even though she's a rookie, she's gonna get a beyblade and try her best to do well at the sport.

And since you made that Seth from the OC reference, I can't help but imagine Kai as being a lot like Seth now..minus Seth's hair, lol.
I also love how you know about all of these wonderful shows/tv dramas that I happen to like, too.

Good song choices on your profile for the DLS soundtrack, it's bringing back some nostalgia, for sure :D

Probably gonna read this for another couple of hours now.. -nodnod-