this was a shit story filled with nonsense

Tortured, raped, beaten, humiliated, and they still don't rain him to defend himself. That's just a bad story, doesn't help that you fall into mixing tech ideas with magic.

"I'll finish this story no matter what," the author declared, just before abandoning the story.

You've got more typos than a writer has any right to.

You missed out on "randy Remus ran a random race".

Enjoying the story, thanks for sharing it with us.

Ok I'm asuming that fanfictiion is just fucked up but they killed your story .

Harry can withstand the imperio curse from Barty Crouch Jr. and Voldemort, but he falls to Malfoy?

I look forward an update from you

This is really good

plese update

Is Harry, like stupid or something? Even in canon, he wasn't this bad. He was always careful during the horcrux hunt, like when the dragon dropped them in the middle of nowhere and he was tired but still got up to up wards and shit. He was also quick on the draw, like when Narcissa was checking if he was dead for the Dark Lord and the Death Eaters in the Forbidden Forrest. He didn't ask why she was asking if Draco was alive instead of just telling everyone he was alive. He understood and just answered her question. Sorry but I just don't like dumb Harry!

bullshit,this is fucking bullshit, are u trying to say he doesnt want to take revenge on her? that bitch fucking raped him, and he just gets over it, like oh well shit happens? u either are an incredibly bad writer or u have never felt any human emotions

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Great Beginning!