It's good your making a plot _ I HATE it when people just rush into things. But somtimes people can pull it off.

Yo! Yuukan/Genesis/Hey You (xD) here grammer nazi and shonen-ai obsessive! *cough* Okay down to business...

I can totally see where you're coming from with this fic I think your planning, idea, coherence with plot and vocabulary is superb. I found it enjoyable, and admirable to read through the fic and see the care into the wording and structure of the feeling, you can see that clearly, quite excellent indeed. You didn't rush things, which is always a plus.

Alas, how much time do you spend on proofreading? I found multiple spelling errors and some punctuation problems that sometimes that caused a bit of confusion on the reading. Also, look out for repeated verbs, mainly those that deal with speech. "Yuan Hissed" is one I see a lot, maybe try to find differnet ways of saying that.

Try and remember when reading over, quotations, mispellings, proper use of punctuation (don't forget when there should be interrogation marks and such) and capitalization.

Other then a little proofreading though none the less, amazing job! I found the story pretty enjoyable and overall, it was a pleasure to read indeed. .

AW! _

That was adorable! Really! It truly was a very very good fic! I hope I'll be seeing more from you in the future!

I thought this epilogue was perfect. To die for even. I sadly did forget about Kratos' promise. That was a very clever way to make closure. This truly is a lovely soulful Kratos/Yuan fic. Thank you for writing it.

zomg o_o no yuie and kratos! ;~; damnit yggdrasill, you bastard, just let them love! Great detail in this chapter :D

My god, Kratos got beat up! And little Yuan is doing his best to save him! That's so sweet! Update soon please, I can't wait to read more (and don't worry about writer's blcok, most people understand!)

Ih! You updated! Finally! *hops up and down*

I loved this chappie, ofcourse! Lots of emotion and stuffs! _

What will happen to Yuan and Kratos? Hmm... Oh, update soon, okays? Pwease?

*hug*

Yay, and update! I thought you went off and died somewhere. I loved how Yuan stepped in and saved kratos, hehehe MEEP, so cute and smexy! I can't wait to see the epilogue, and remember, you promised fluff! and by gawd, you better put LOTS of fluff *jabs you with pitchfork*

I don't care if it is short! It was still simply wonderful! I cannot help but wait imaptiently for the epilogue after reading this. These lines seemed very in-character. I can see the amount of effort and work put into this. Good job.

aw slash! and they're actually in character!

wow...this chapter...was really evil and cute XD Just how I like it. Damnit why leave off there? WHY?

I've read other yaoi fics, but this is one of the better ones! And I definitely don't say that often (cause I don't find them that often...). But I digress, and I hope you update soon!

*crying*

Yuan no! Yggdrasill is such an... A-hole! *sniff sniff*

Can't wait for the next chapter! Implied lemon! woot!

(Oh, right, that first part of this chapter... made me think of implied rape. Yggdrasill, you cad!)

Wow, this was a very well-written chapter. I love your detail-rich descriptions (though not so detailed that it detracts from the story), and you seemed to really capture Yggy's true cruelty. And Kratos, being the knight in shining armor for the battered and bruised Yuan is a priceless picture .

Ahh, with the promise that was in your author's note at the bottom, I can't wait for the next chapter! ~. *Is a diehard yaoi fan*

Yeah, happy to see this is all playe dout so well. They really do act as you would imagine them. Your characterizations are right on the mark. Looking forward to the excellence that is the next chapter of Emerald Flame..

Poor Yuan, I can't help but feel sorry for him. Also, the dinner and night situation was quite cute. A dear little exchange from one another.