This is really good. Have you seen Yandere Shoujo's expansion of the idea, Stomping Ground?

A very nice story! I really like the contrast between the outside and the inside. (I did find one slightly confusing part: "To say that Leorio had been confused would have been like calling the sun green." The sun isn't green, therefore Leorio isn't confused?)

kurapika's so intelligent here_. poor him being haunted by a ghost. i guess that's the of the best idea in anime that the manga don't have. and i like you broaden the idea. i was just wondering and wanna know more what happens to Kurapika after that, this fic's fixing my wonders.

excellent. very well written. a nice piece of work. the story's a tad fast paced and NOstrad was kinda OOC but what the heck. This is really good. _V

Whoa...that's pretty cool...

I really enjoyed this story.

I especially liked the fact that it was a gen fic. Admittedly I don't go reading about the hunterXhunter fandom that often, but often it seems that *everything* is romance, especially slash sort of romance.

So this story made a nice change. D

*snickers* I enjoyed a lot of the little details you included. Like the melodramatic Neon. The way she's moved on to poetry. The hints provided by Senritsu and Leorio. The way he wasn't used to Christmas.

I loved watching Kurapica's thoughts, and how you showed him being mostly outwardly fine, but inwardly he's still worried and not completely stable.

I adored the scene where Killua called Kurapica up and the way you detailed Kurapica's reaction.

I don't know if your going to continue this or not, this story read more like a oneshot to me. If you do decide to continue it though, I'd definetly look forward to it. I'd really love to see where you take it.

Love. I love this story so much. It deals with a few ponderings of mine (how much of the Nostrad business Kurapica will actually be allowed to handle) it's gen, it's well written and angsty and I lovelovelove it.

Though the story IS good and the ideas are interesting, you narrate too fast. You tell the story and it's like watching a movie on fast-foward, maybe the same story divided in chapters and with details, explanations, conversations, (etc) would help the reader to see what YOU see in your story.

Please don't take this as an offence or a flame, I tell you this so it could be more enjoyable. The story really is good, just if we read it slowly and detailed it would prove much better.

Anyway, I'm hoping to read next chapter soon!

Yours sincerely, Kari Ishikawa

Wow, I'm the first one...lol...much honored.

This is to Yukitsu who I owe a lot of reviews... I alway nag her for fics *guilty*

Dark, Sinister, Angst. Love it!