Really well done. I'm glad that you didn't try to write the lyrics of the painful song, and I'm glad that mention was made of Stormer feeling sort of fake and empty. Roxy's reaction was very authentic and believable. Lovely last lines.

question. if that friggin song makes stormer sad as hell, why the hell did she write and record it?

More is good.

Rather torn myself as to you doing a follow up, on the 1 hand, like you said, not many loose ends left. other hand, as one who wrote a 15 chapter Jem fic for a creative writing grade. (got a B) I know great story-weaver when I see 1. A definite A. Still on the fence whether Ipost mine sometime. If i do, (teasers) Roxy adopts a SL girl, Clash reveals REALLY messed up, tragic past, Pizzazz shoots at Riot for sneaking around her house. Anywho, keep up this good writing and I'll read anything ya write. PS. Would love some more fics from ya.

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I love how you have Roxy process things. She comes across as really thorough and articulate with her own train of thought, which is a great representation and one I'm sure she was capable of as a character in the Jem universe. She got a poor rep on the cartoon outside her chief episode, but boy did you learn something about her.

So your writing kinda builds on her personality and Stormer is of course, real sweet anyway. But she can still be naughty and I like how you show that. Her smoking when stressed made me smile too. Ooh, so bad Stormer, lol!

Roxy and Stormer are a perfectly matched pair. The only real true romance in the show, if you think about it. Whatever you write next will have me hooked.

Okay, if you DO write another chapter and need ideas I'd love it if you could write like a one-dayer, where Stormer and Roxy have a day round London and do couply things and the whole chapter was just their fun day with surprises and good times. They deserve it. England could be like their bolt hole, lol, away from the industry, the Misfits, Eric, etc. I'd love it if Roxy surprised Stormer with something unexpected. You're such a good writer, I''m sure you could do them even more justice.

The real story is just beginning! I would like to know and I'm sure others would too if Aja stumbles across their secret. Or if Stormer even confides in Aja. To end the story there would be like reading a wonderful book, only to find some pages have been torn out. I really hope you continue to write Roxy and Stormer as a loving couple. It's written beautifully.

It's the most gorgeously-written story! :) Roxy makes a ton more sense to me for Stormer than Kimber, or any other character in Jem did or could. For the reasons you write about. If something did happen to Stormer, I too think Roxy would surprise people by showing that other side to her! She was such an under represented main character albeit the 'Roxy Rumbles' so you did her way more justice than the show ever did Imho!

I know everyone wants another chapter, but if I were writing this I would hold it here, because no more needs to be said and the imagination can take over. That's just my view, but whatever you choose, once again thanks for writing this, it's a Classic.

Chapter 4 please.

I always knew Roxy was a total softie for Stormer. You don't even have to look hard to find a little chemistry in the cartoon. ;))

Excellent piece of work, well done! I hope you don't add any more to it, it's fabulous as it is. Xx

perfect.

Really outstanding work! It's the kind of fanfic that you don't want to end. One little question I'm wondering. Does Stormer know that Roxy and Pizzazz had a small fling? Not that I think it would bother Stormer one way or another. All I can say is more, more and more please!

This is a beautiful work, and it is inspiring to me that you're still working on it. Maybe I can muster up the courage to finish my own. Thank you for writing.

Literally so freaking happy to see this updated. This fic is so utterly well written. The characters go so in depth and you can feel the pain Stormer goes through. There is so much detail and it winds up so intricately. It's such a touching and wonderful story. Supreme job with it.