This is quite, quite interesting. I liked the poem, but I think you've got a tiny bit of issue with the rhythm in certain places.

For example:

A ship in the middle of land

A power cord hidden in sand

..is just a little iffy. Also,

So as our two teams wave and say good-bye

I look at the black smoke rising up into the sky

...The second line doesn't quite flow as well as the others.

That being said, I love the subject, and the style. I think it's really original, I enjoyed it. Great work.

I know nothing of Lost or it's characters. But it was really good. I liked. I read your E-mail after I reviewed Stealing My Heart so I came upon this poem. And I'm glad I read it. Anyway, I saw your change in your user lookup, much better.

this was awesome! go team Locke! I really enjoyed it! You should do another one from the P.O.V. of someone choosing Jack. Though Locke's side is better!

Wow, awesome poem! I loved it! Write more soon! :)

That was really really good!