U-Uhm,please update!I really,really loved this story,believe me,I've been reading this for 3 years already!So uhm,I would srsly love an update!Okay?Please continue this!A decade has passed!

Keep going this is awesome hurry make the next chapter!

I would have to say it was awesome! You really captured the true sense of pokemon and the characters. Although using cuss words or any kind of cursing is defanaintly not the pokemon way. Also May doesn't yell that often, unlike Misty. But in all in all it was great, a lot better then other fan fictions

wrong kind of course again, cuz cousre can also mean in the saying of course. still good, just might want to change the homophone right.

umm... i think the kind of "coarse" is course. as in golf COURSE. COARSE means rough, like coarse salt. it's okay. it's a homophone. besides that, good story!

Brendan looked up and nod as he came to us. What was Mom doing? Why she called him? What was going on? Did Mom thought he’ll be my boyfriend?

- Did mum THINK he'd be my boyfriend?

“Hello I’m May Maple and this is my brother Max.” I said absently “Wait what did YOU called ME!”

- A comma if the sentence carries on.

“Hello I’m May Maple and this is my brother Max,” I said absently. “Wait what did YOU called ME!”

“Um, Miss?” Brendan said unsurely

- Full stops at the end of a sentence.

Now I was calmed enough to exanimate(spelling) Brendan, his clothing was a t-shirt with a Treecko and said: “ My starter.” and a pair of pants, this was of all the colors you could imagine.

(sp.) examinate

“Sure,”

- Only end speech with a comma if the sentence carries on. e.g. "Sure," she smiled. Or "Sure."

“HEY! Brendan, May, you please help me unpack. And Brendan after that take May to her room,” Mom said from somewhere inside the house

- There should be a full-stop at the end of every sentence.

Check it through for more errors like these.

Oh my, this is a good fanfiction... I will give you a cookie if you continue! WHE *gives cookie, runs off screeching WHEE*

hmm...how interesting. Um...just to let you know, you had some errors that you should look out for. I'll be honest, this could be written better. I know people everywhere are bothering you about updating, but lets think about this: Do people want a good, well written story, or a not so well written story with frequent updates? Trust me, don't rush yourself. Just take your time and have fun with it. Well, enough rambling, i think I'll enjoy this story. What an interesting way to start an adventure. Well, I'll see ya later!

Update soon! Or else I shall hit you with my Fluffy Pillow of Doom!

you know, this fic wasnt half bad. seeing this in May's POV is an interesting twist. A great idea would be to switch POV's between Brendan and May every few chapters. You had a few errors i saw, but its looking okay. If you ever get the chance, i would love for you to read my fics. If you want some Brendan action, read "the legend of final destiny" and "Bushido league: a Samurai's quest". Please update when you can, i shall keep my eye on this one. Oh yeah, some more description on the scenery and characters would help, but that's just me. Au revior!

U BETTER WRITE MORE!

Do you think I could be your number one reviewer? Haha, I never got a craving for Crunch before! Sometimes I really want Reeses badly! Hey, Minun, do you like cheesecake? I think that's the best food ever! CuTe ToGePi, I think It'd be great if you put in a cheese holiday! I know...I'm obsessed with cheese...Well, till the next review! Bye Minun, CuTe ToGePi!

its ok but mays last name is thorn not maple.

Cool, a minun! They're my favorite advanced pokemon! Tell your minun I said that! If it is your minun...Or is it The Minun? Oh, sorry, i'm getting off topic...You're right, May's not like Misty, she's a lot nicer! I mean, May's nicer than Misty, not the other way around.

Update soon!