I absolutely love the way you describe the flashback scenes. You really made Wuya sound creepy and terrifying even while she was being seductive and playful. Also, i think you did very well to keep the rape implied rather than outright state it.

The way it was written made it sound so poetic. It sounded like a seasoned author had written it. Well done )

awe

love it you should make more wuyarai stories

Oh man, how deep. XD My need for RaixKimi-ness has been quelled. Raimundo is such a great character... I nearly cried with him. I'm glad I read this!

Beautifully written, your use of descriptions is wonderful. Great job on this!

wow... i've never gotten anything like this from the cartoon. if i did i would watch it religiously

Wow, that was wonderful! Your writing style is very poetic and descriptive, which is a very refreshing thing on this site. My favourite thing about this whole story was the imagery you associated with Wuya's scent- everyone's scents, really. The whole thing is told in the perspective of the sense of smell, which is really neat and different, because that's not a sense that is often used.

Very nice.

Beautiful. Just Beautiful! That was one of the best stories I have ever read! The descrpions were amazing, the plot was genius, and I loved the RaiKim kiss! GREAT JOB!

~Tgurl~

P.S Of course I'm favoring this ;)

Woh (Adds to favs)

Ooh...very nice. Having a hard time picturing it like that, but love the concept.

aww, that's so cute. i feel real sorry for Rai, turning to the dark side made him have those nightmares... those horribly weird and horrifying nightmares... O_O And the kiss was so cool. just like i expected it to be. _

That was beautiful. One of the best stories I've ever read

Aw... that's so SAD! Poor Rai! I shall avange Wuya! ~takes out stick and starts poking Wuya~

Wuya: Stop poking me you little pest!

Me: HA! NEVER! ~keeps poking~

uh... he doesnt really seem that type, does he? but i love the story!