Yay! There are actually DNAngel stories on FFN that aren't shounen-ai, or any of the other permutations I'd rather not read...

Congratulations on a plot and thought! And I know this is coming across as sarcastic, but I really do mean it.

Thank you.

Ee hee. Greatjob. Not often you find something meaningful in something so trivial (not your story, the fly thing). This was very well written and it puts a lot of depth into the characters even though it was short-ish. It really showed your understanding of the characters.

Great job!

Oni

Woww...I love the whole symbolism thing, even if it was with flies...And how Dark was like, playing big brother and explaining about how Satoshi is broken.

o I love this fic! The characters are perfectly in character, I myself have trouble keping Dark in character. Great job! Analogy was great. I must say I love it that you're feeding my hate for Krad!

I can see why Hiwatari was so upset.

Playing Krad for a day can be bad for a fellow's moral, but playing Kr4d is just plain fun. And really, it's Krad-ing In The Name Of science, so I don't see why he got so upset about it!Well, all right, maybe I do. Actually, the idea of Satoshi played Krad (or Kr4d) is highly entertaining, in the same way that a [Rocky] Horror [Picture] Show is entertaining. That is, downright unsettling.

I /might/ get all indignant-like due to our disagreement in Daisuke's character, but you said, 'Daisuke asked innocently,' and I have not a bone to pick with you on the subject. Because Daisuke /is/ innocent, and he's nice, sometimes a bit fatally so. And maybe Daisuke wasn't perfect and sweet and sugar to the nth, but he had his hamartia, sure enough, and it's great to see that for a change. So even if it was seemingly focussed on Satoshi, the step-removed actually reveals a lot of Daisuke's character.

I, myself, have once again not heard of the concept you introduced. Well, I know the concept, but I have never heard the story "about the scientist that put flies in a jar for a day", although I cannot blame Daisuke for being skeptical of the story with such a title. However, if he had been brought up as he should have, he would know it was an Old School Story. And he interrupted! You don't interrupt a story-teller, or you end up with a frying pan down your throat. (Remind me not to interrupt you. I'll probably end up with a rotary engine in my throat instead of something as passive as the Holy Punk's cooking utensil)

I could say something conclusive to end the review. But that would be-

Wai! Since I just read that other fanfic by you, I had to see what else you'd written. This one is extremely über-awesome. Please keep writing these! I sort of saw the ending coming... but at the same time I see so many possibilites for whatever might be next in this storyline... if you write it, I'll read it! Thanks again for writing!

my, this was well done. the analogy carried through nicely and as for the ending, i couldn't help but be reminded of Daisuke's rotten luck. i liked it.

T_T Poor Hiwatari. Oh wow, this was great. This was really powerful. VERY powerful. This challenge is interesting, I want to see more. _ Keep writing!

always,

el