I like the plot but you're writing style is a bit choppy. It feels like you're writing a list of things that happened rather than telling a story. Try making your sentances longer and more descriptive. Also, you should try to use more interesting words like 'crimson' intead of 'red' or 'dashed' instead of 'ran'. Keep at it, though. I want to see how those Tampani creatures turn out.

Very interesting. Does The Shee miss his friends after the crash?