I really loved that fic. And its prequel too! I wish there were some pics to have a better grasp of Carmelita's thief suit and some other characters.
The only bad thing I noticed, was the very poor French you put in. I guess ou don't know any (or very little) French but if you write another fic with french words, I'll be happy to help a little

Au Chautey Enchanté
Messrs. e Madames Mesdames et Messieurs

Just to say a couple. :D Great work anyway!

I died laughing from reading this chapter Bentley DOES have a crush on Yuri

This is good, I have obviously read other fanfictions, but yours are always my favorite. Keep up the good work.

You get their E-mail address and send a message.

So lets get back here I woke up naked and Bentley and Murray were standing there watching me and taking my clothes off so. Carmelita said oh and they were trying to have sex with me. Carmelita said and I rather have this guy named Nathan Campbell have sex with me then you guys.

Jerry ye cockroach is happy for pretty Yuri, Bentley, Philipe, Celeste, Austin and Belinda... Jerry very happy for family. Jerry found interesting Kitty's story for Kitty make interesting story for Jerry to read. Jerry be impressed in detail of Kitty's story; Jerry be very impressed indeed, but Kitty could use places like the Kremlin in Russia for heist scenes in Kitty's future stories nes pas? Jerry suggests to pm people who Kitty think smart in security subjects or people who investigate thoroughly history and the like... Jerry ye cockroach would like to help pretty Kitty for Kitty lack substance in heist scene. Jerry not saying that Kitty is dumb; not at all Jerry ye cockroach not insult pretty Kitty but Jerry suggest Kitty to make investigations of history to make the story more interesting
PS: Jerry ye cockroach sends his regards to pretty Kitty Petro

Hello... ye name is Jerry ye cockroach. . . it is disgusting when men take advantage of pretty Yuri; Jerry be mad at weasel... no Jerry be furious at weasel for making pretty Yuri betray Bentley. If Kitty would make Jerry happy Jerry like to help Kitty and pretty Yuri against dumb weasel. Jerry hates when Jerry sees men/women be bad to others... makes Jerry go mad and Jerry doesn't like to go mad.
Jerry knows he late for help for you finished story but accept Jerry ye cockroach's help for information and gossip (Jerry like gossip)
PS: sorry for the way of speaking of Jerry ye cockroach but for author (me) to understand ye character (Jerry) author must speak and act like Jerry for a better psychological comprehension of ye character... If pretty Kitty Petro want to hear boring life story of Jerry ye cockroach or something like that please PM Jerry back if interested.
PPS: Jerry likes weasel... on stew, or on wall decoration to make house pretty :3

Lmao! When carmelita kissed sly I imagined him fainting with that goofy grin on his face! Lolz

loving the series so far, but i gotta ask when these are set. like after game 1,2, or 3?

That was one hell of a long but awesome story im now going to read your sequel i will review on it after im finished reading, METAL 4EVER! )

Not to troll but why does call each other 'love' or 'my love'? I know really good friends might call each other that every once in a while but they constantly repeat it. Again I'm not trying to be a critique but isn't using the word love to describe a friend stretching it?

Cute story so far, but I do have a few things to say.

One, pretty much everyone goes out of character quite often, and being OOC is a big no-no in the fanfiction biz.

Two, you might want to study su espanol un poquito mas. "Corazon" is "heart", not "love". "Love" is "amor".

Three, do a bit BG research. Carmelita's boss' name is Barkley, not Rob.

Anyways, sorry if I came off as a bit harsh. Judging from the lack of Sly 3 characters, I'd say this is a pretty old fic, and I'm sure you've improved by now.

Good luck!

-SBG

WOW! that was great I loved it great reading congrats! I loved your kitty petro character and was she serious in that chapter where carmelita called her about polarsky you know . about what she said with her and Ling wink wink well done now reading sequel well done!.

another great story to a great series from a great author

Nice chapter referenced past events but i don't see how the plot progresses from this