Harry's such a whiny cunt. What a fucking prick, going behind Ron's back like that. I hope Harry dies in this story. Fuck him.

Wow, the sequel was even better than the original! I'm so glad I finally got the time to read it! I noticed a few poor/awkward word choices, grammatical errors and typos. but all in all it was written very well, just like "Going Through the Motions". You really should consider making sure there are spaces between scene switches, or some indication of a switch, as it is very confusing to the reader. I know this is probably not your fault because this site deletes breaks after uploading. You should check the uploaded versions and make sure there's an indication of the switch.

The revelation of Hermione's boss as a Death Eater totally shocked me! In hindsight, I should have seen it, but, well, I didn't. Another shocking exposure was Hermione being the traitor unknowingly.

I liked how you showed Mad-Eye getting more and more paranoid until he eventually forced Mackenzie to fire Harry and then didn't allow the Weasleys or Lupin to speak up because they were emotionally involved. It's the not-so-major character's development, and not just the trio plus Ginny, that makes this story rare.

There are so many more parts I loved: Harry and Ron playing video games, Hermione's addiction to magic, the whole drama of Ron on trial, the tension between Harry and Lupin over Lupin's love for Lily (I didn't like the idea itself, it just seems unlike Lupin to me, but I LOVED the emotions it invoked)... I could go on and on, but I think I'm going to spare you the summary of your plot, because that's basically what I would be doing.

The idea of splitting the prophecy in two was absolutely ingenious! I loved the idea! Although the wording of your half was more awkward and didn't sound similar to the canon half.

I wad delighted with the final battle scene! I've read many final battle scenes and this one was excellent! The idea of Harry's heart being shocked to release his unknown power and Voldemort convincing him that Dumbledore was holding things back from him and Harry believing him and getting drunk on his own power and continuing to attack Voldemort even though it was doing nothing just because he liked to see his own power and Ron forcing him to see reason and obey the plan and Ron also provoking Hermione out of the the Imperius Curse... I'm rambling, I know, but that's how much I enjoyed this scene.

I just have one request: can you PLEASE write a sequel? I'd love to see what Harry does in his self-imposed exile and how Hermione and Ron fare without him. I want to know what the letters say. Oh, and GINNY! How can you leave Harry and Ginny like that? Ginny doesn't even know he loves her! He needs to come back, they need to get together! Harry Potter may have ended a while ago, but that doesn't mean you have to end your interpretation. Please write more!

Wow. I just read this fiction and the previous one. (It's been a long night) and I loved them. I liked how there was so much going on and how you portrayed everyones relationships with each other so well.

I just wanted to let you know that this is by far the best HP fiction I have ever read. It was well thought out and the only story that ever truly captured the essence of the characters. I'm a satisfied customer!

Since most people like constructive criticism, I would just say that sometimes you forgot to put a break between sections, making it hard for a second to figure out that the scene had changed. But since you finished writing this over a year ago, it's no matter.

Well done!

~melissa

that was soo good! now i want to read more. what a cliff hanger! wow! you seriously should consider writing an epilouge or something that would give the readers closure. now i want to know what is in those letters. though they probably just say how gratefull harry is to have them and that he will see them again, or something like that.

well once again, you did a fantastic job!

OMG! I loved it when Herimone was under the imperious curse and Ron was throwing ever insult that he could think of.

I can see Harry throwing himself to save Ron in hp 7. it is a very "harry thing" to do.

Is Dumbledore the mentor that it is talking about?

love this chapter!

I never would have guessed that it was Hermione who was leaking the info! I figured that it was Ginny since she has the connection thing going on. loved this chapter!

I just heard you on the wizards Wireless podcast. Just thought I would drop a line to let you know.

there better be some sort of chapter about the letters, and ginny, she was mad at him and had no idea why he took the course he did. plus we need an epilogue, this is too much of a cliff hanger please pick up that keyboard and type! love your story, keep it going, on an emotional side maybe but either way keep it going~!.

- Ben

teardrop...are you going to make this a trilogy? i hope so. the story was amazing!

Sigh, and I think on that it's time for me to go. I think you're a wonderful storyteller, but (and I know it's only my opinion, but I think future canon backs me up) - I really don't think you get Harry at all.

Okay, are you sure Harry's not wearing one of those charms, because he's acting very OOC, too. At least with Ron and Hermione, there is a reason. Ron actually scared me in that first scene. I can't help but feel a bit disappointed.

Wow, the effects on Ron and Hermione are cool! Way cool. I'm worried that they missed their appointment with the Healer though, that can't be good.

I'm also on the side that Lupin is in the wrong. I'm disgusted by his realtionship with Lily. Even though it was a long time ago and noting can be done to change it, it DOES ruin his character for me. He's not the man I thought he was. Harry doesn't have years and years with his parents to make up for any bad thing. The only thing he does have is the story that his parents were ideal, and the echos of their screams for the Dementors. That one good thing has now been tarnished, and it's not like he can fall back on good memories to balance the bad. I think he's well within his rights to want to distance himself from Lupin. I can't see how he'd want to react any other way.

Urgh. Completely ignored all references to Cho - would never happen.

I knew it was going to be Ron as soon as Hermione's boss said they needed a Pureblood wizard. This is going to be fun. I can't for the life of me figure out what Malfoy is up to, but I wonder if Hermione and Harry are going to be questioned about their visit to Jeffrey since he now appears to be missing. I'm lost...so onward.