That was good so what's next?

One of the best stories ever written, very good job!

oh yeah there neeeeeeeds to be a sequel! What about Raenef either using his 'skills' to try to recreate that moment before the name was revealed? Particularly if it was in the middle of Eclipse trying to teach him how to be a demon lord? Raenef would be rather distracting...

Maybe raenef trying to adapt to being a demon lord? getting mistaken for a prostitute at the council meeting? using the experience as a cover for some kind of plot?

or, with Raenef already being a proper demon lord using his charm on eclipse because he's bored or maybe something against another demon lord just for the comedy, anyway i'll be looking out for chapter 2 :P

cool

I loved your story! The mere thought of the way Eclipse and Raenef V meet being that of what you suggest is more than enough to send me into an fangirl fit! I hope you do turn this into a trilogy and if you do, I suggest you add a lot of lemon and lime in their daily activities! It's always so much better when you can get a nosebleed. Even though the story is old, I look forward to the possibility of a sequel!

Yeah, I think Raenef makes a better geisha-like prostitute than a thief.

This story was awesome! lol I loved it! Please keep up the great work!

I absolutely adore this. This fanfiction is possibly the best I've seen for Demon Diary. The ideas, the description, the wording, the fluidity of it all... It certainly had me reading and unable to look away. I would very much like it to be the 'trilogy' idea you've had.

I noticed a few things, though, that I should point out for you, being an author myself.

Much of the time, you make sentences into run-ons. This can be fixed quite easily by simply reading it over to yourself aloud; that way, you can hear how it sounds. Of course, we all know that run-ons can be simply fixed by making the sentence into two, but using semicolons or hyphens works even better; it makes the passages flow a bit better.

I noticed a few grammatical errors, other than the run-on sentences, which can easily be fixed by simply reading over it. I've also noticed that you've used some words incorrectly; mainly confusing them for other words, or making a small typo. Another thing is that I've noticed you've sometimes forgotten a period or ending mark. Again, a simple read through would fix that.

Other than that, I completely 'fangirled' over this fic! I simply love it. I haven't read a fic that I've liked so much in a LONG time. Keep writing! You're terrific at it! If you fix the minor mistakes that you have, I'm 100% sure you'll be one of the greatest authors here on FanFiction, and even in the outside world, should you ever decide to make a novel of your own.

If you need someone to look over your work, to catch anything that you might miss, I'd be happy to help; just say the word.

With Much Love,

Hikari Aiyano

A Very Satisfied Fan

Well worth the read. Good job!

-All Tears Must Fall

Trust me your efforts are appreiciated. Thank you so much for giving me time to just sit t my computer and read your fanfic. If you want a sequel, than write a damn sequel! We don't control your impulses and your ideas. Oh yea, if you want to make a seuel, do it with Eclipse and Raenef are trapped somewhere and they well...

I love this ficcy! I love how you write and I really love your version of the story. In fact, I think I prefer it to the original manga!

I also think a part of me just died inside from cuteness -

overload! Seriously, this fic is awesome. There were a few grammar mistakes and you use 'then' instead of 'than' quite a bit, but I make mistakes all the time. Overall, despite a few mistakes, I think this is a really well written piece and it was an absolute pleasure to read!

*favs*

that was really cute. i love it. you just made my day for me. and trust me, what a long day it is going to be. and your story was so well thought out. it makes my half-assed wannabe random thought of stories look terribly bad. but it was great and i look forward to reading more.

It is always so refreshing to read something like this because it doesn’t come along too often. Your beautiful, descriptive style of writing 'shows' rather than 'tells' the story, adding that little bit extra which completely pulls in a reader and doesn’t let them go until the end of the story.

You over-use commas a little; sometimes you tend to over-complicate sentences and your spelling needs a bit of work. But all things considered, you are a fantastic writer with enormous potential. Please don't stop writing! :D

i think a sequal would be kool

interesting idea...i liked it a lot

youre amazing at imagery..snaps for you

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