Wtf

You spelled volleyball wrong

Awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww mushy lovey stuff.

Haori

Oh guess what we're mates!

Gramps sounds like Koga!

i think that you did a great job better than most fanfictions but it would help if the whole thing was in english but other wise i loved it!

How about kamisyi for a girl and koyasha for a boy if there both girls than the first girl name up top and hetinale if both boys name up top and inuyoga.?

Love it

Loved it

The idea is cute (now I know that this was writen-oh god- 9 years ago, so your stile must have changed.
The Japanese is unnecessary & distracting. It makes readers stop & reword it in their mind. If readers don't know the words then they have to guess at words & just wonder what your on about.
You didn't put quotations around some of the speech (it is also disorienting).

So far the story is cute. I hope inuyasha just goes as himself or something with his ears viewable :3
Kagome would look good as a shrine maiden but if kikiyo just died then that's not the best idea ;

She should be pregnant such a good story so far

Good story but there are a few things you need to fix:
1)Spelling- Mostly good but there are quite a few errors.
2)Author's note/comment- These need to go at the end or beginning. They should not come in the middle of the story.
3)Contractions- When using words like don't and couldn't make sure there is an apostrophe.

let me guess... koga? XD

Defenetly not for kids but really good