god! i laugh my ass off. good job.

Hm

the oc acts like she's on crack or something how is this going to be a hiei romance?

This was awesome! Loved every minute of it!

Your story seems a little "forced" I used to have the same problem when I first started writting. When You write you need to have a good sense of the atmosphere and mood of the story. You need to be feeling the same mood as your characters to sufficiently write about it. I would suggest while you're writting to listen to music that is the same mood as what you're witting, it sounds silly but it really does help. I do love the plot though, and you have much better grammar than me XD good luck (:

GASP! Loved this so so much! No kidding. I think this is prob my fav YYH fic! I think! Yes! A definite YEAH! God I love Callie - she is just too too adorable! Like a monkey! ...No, I didn't say that, Hiei did. Haha.. ..Anyways, yes I loved this, and I'm gonna read the sequence of this - there is one right? I read it at the bottom of this chap... I think..
Nah, the ending was cute! But no Hiei... But there's a sequence so it doesn't matter rly. Love this!

Hey, wasn't Botan and Yukina healers?

Lol! I LOVE it! I love how they ended up getting the wrong girl!

Beware of the wrath of HIEI!

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Oh, and Kurama! xD

Lol, who doesn't love an Uke boy? Especially yaoi fans? xD HAHAHA

My opinion of the Callie and Hiei pairing is...cute, cute cute, and HILARIOUS! xD

Aw, I find it SO cute Yoko thinks Callie as his own Kit! Adorable xD

lol what is her eye and hair color?

This is great and all but honestly- Hiei wouldn't call a girl a whore... o.o

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wonderful oc