YO, Wolf... ! [ nope... still not the entire alias... sorry... ;P ]

Well well well, as John Lennon sang...

I was extremely pleased about this story. IT's not on a par with PITCH AND PINK, your most impressive work to me (until i read your 4th sTTory, at least...), but it's pretty good, i should say.

Not only is the plot interesting (again, should i say... ;D), but you have made a real effort about spelling : far less typos, word lacks and word confusions this time. Kudos to ya for the obvious improvement form-wise !

The storyline was pretty interesting, and i must say i enjoyed the original beach part : hardly ever read abt the Titans spending time by the sea in summer, so this "breath of fresh air" ya brought with that part is most welcome. New ideas, i love ! And just the idea of Raven being harassed by males... ah ah, nice one there ! I also like the lil' confusion bw BB and Jinx at the bar, each one failing to immediately identify the other coz of their different looxxxx. That was clever too. But i was surprised that Raven didn't recognize BB's voice at once and was about to lash out at him. I mean, she knows his voice by heart, doesn't she, so why would she think the one speaking is another boy and start rebuffing him, before actually identifying him ? Hearing his voice, she should have immediately picked him out and turned around screaming : "Beast Boy !" Well, that's what seems the most logical to me, since she knows his voice, since she should be able to recognize it even before actually catching sight of him... don't ya think ?

JInx was pretty complicated here, psychology-wise, wishing Raven to leave while she is infatuated wz her. I understood why she did it, but i'll say that she uselessly complicated the whole situation. Just my opinion there. This complex reaction/behaviour of hers certainly gives her some depth, on a character study level, and that is another welcome point. The Bad Luck charm regularly appeared like someone with the gift of the gab, cheeky, cocky, quick to tackle verbally... but not that smart, alas, and not that deep, double alas. I often regretted that, and would have liked a Jinx with more depth, more psychological thickness, and your story here offers that, which i am grateful for.

I liked how Raven tried to convince Jinx - and almost begged her, actually - to become a Titan. That was very sweet, very powerful, feeling-wise. Good job on this as well.

One thing i do regret about your stories : you almost always use the first names of the girls in your sentences, and that makes tons of "Raven" and "Jinx" in every chapter. Far better would have been to find alternative by the use of periphrasis, such as "the sorceress", "the pink-haired girl", "the empath", "the Bad Luck girl", "the (former) thief" ... that kind of things, you see. This is a great help in order to repeat oneself and not continuously use the same words on and on. I rely on that language device a lot in my stories, to avoid boring the reader by writing solely the first names all the way.

Oh, i've got a question : i got totally puzzled by the title of this story. LOST FILE : CORBIN LOVE SUBROSA, really ?! Man, i'm at a complete loss regarding that. How the heck does that title relate to the content ? No offense, but you probably could have found a more appropriate title, or one that would make more sense for the readers. Just saying, again, no offense intended.

So, what's wz all that, then ? Well, after a slight disappointment with NO ROOM LEFT IN HELL (an therefore no favoriting last time), i can tell myself very satisfied with this fiction here. I really appreciated the whole thing, and i give ya pats in the back galore for this very nice sTTory. Glad that Rae and Jinx ended up together again, after it would have seemed they might not. And since i definitely enjoyed it, this fix' ends up right besides PITCH AND PINK in my fav's basket !

Congrats again for this cool bunch, and i guess i'l start yr last sTTory - DISTORTION, i think the title is, yes ? - tonight, or tomorrow morning at latest, so you can safely expect a 4th review by next week. I hope i can favorite that last sTTory of yours as well... we'll see ! ;)

Have a great day, week, month, (end of) year, be fine, keep smiling and hoping... all things positive !

Ciao !

/ Léo \\\\

Raven's thoughts on homosexuality are perhaps the most interesting ones I have seen in any Jinx/Raven story, yet.

Aw, how sweet. Really liked this story, and the prequel to this one, even though this is my first review.

Except a few minor grammar errors, it was absolutely lovely, from the start until the very end. Although it is a sort of cliché to end a romantic story with a kiss, it felt fitting here.

Oh, how I wish you would write more, but us mortals can only read everything again.

If you would, please keep on writing more awesome stories, don't let your passion for writing end, like mine did.

Sincerely,

Lilith.

hot! jinx and raven are so made for 1 another

cool! clinch? not really, it's acceptable, since i always prefer happy endings anyway!

Ook..that could go both ways...

cute! really cute

interesting, more! so im off to the next chapter!

omg that is the cutest thing ever!

Loved it! Wish you would write more, but I guess not. Oh well...

Please write more if you have the time or whatever. Yeah XD

End? But it was just getting so awesome...

fine, you go right ahead and not go on with this story. I can cope.

it was totally awesome! Great story. Lovely personalities and dialogue.

Aw, that was so sweet. For a little while I thought they were really going to just be friends, but in the end pretty pink cat eyes prevailed. This was a real tear jerker.

I'll bet Beast boy found pretty awkward when he realized he was hitting on Jinx plus I'll bet she found it equally awkward when she realized it was beast boy who was hitting on her.

send it to me