uhmmm..am I supposed to feel anything..?

it was a great idea but i think you should have gone into more detail.

he just went 'poof'?

i wanted to cry i was expecting more detail. thats pretty weird and emotional. why didnt anyone say goodbye to him except iruka. if you had people actually have a conversation with the bushin or even a sudden last burst of emotion fromt he bushin before he vanished i would have cried. even he had his final words and just said goodbye. that was like a last chance to get it out and say their final goodbyes even if the bushin didnt feel the emotions technically it would transfer the 'memories' to naruto on the 'other side'...that could have been a really awesome oneshot. i think you should go back and edit it, we're writers its always fine to go back and edit on a website like this.

i'm being a bit hypocritical because i will never edit my first three stories again cause i'm simply to lazy.

we'll i told you what i think of your one shot. i really hope you decide to rewrite it.

interesting...I liked it!

I like this. i think you should write a second chappy buy should be told from different perseptives so we can know how everyone is coping with Naruto's death.

u kno,

somhow, seein somthing so happy and carefree

seems sad in a way, the way it talked about itself

seemed really sad

good job, keep on writin'

*blinks*... uh... that was rather random... but rather original:). Well... I think it can stay as one chapter, but it also has potential to have more chapters (like your oneshot *hint**hint*

Wow. I'm impressed. You've really gotten a lot better since I last saw you. *huggles* You and I need to get together sometime. I haven't seen you in so long!

WAAH! So sad! *looks around* DANCE ITACHI! DANCE!

In my opinion, this story has MASSIVE potential! It just requires fleshing out to turn a good idea into a great story!

Here's a tip about writing stories. When you're done, leave it alone for a week. Don't even look at it. When the week's over, go over it again and you'll be surprised at how much you'd like to change.

(See, that's a problem nowadays -everyone seems to be always in a rush to get things out right away, instead of slowly nurturing their work.)

Anyway, once again, good work and good luck with your next piece!

it was interesting (no! no dancing! pls!).. have you considered writing one where the real naruto dies and the bushin stays around indeffinitly? to the point where it is a perminate kage bushin and starts acting just like it was the real one? and maybe that one eventually dies and another bushin replaces it? you could make a really long lasting story that way.. just have the personalities slightly different for each one... heck, you could eventually have the original naruto come back after being in a for of death like coma for yrs

Sad indeed..._