SON GOHAN YOU CAN SENSE KI!

there is a massive pothole here, really hoping they patch it. Bulma van just make another dragon radar and itll lead them right to chad.

Great story. It is the first one I read where gohans and videls story is not over the top. It's unfortunate, that you stopped writing it but I greatly appreciated the summary at the end. It's a very complex story you came up with.

my dear gohan, damn pedofile alert all over

I’m glad you posted the epilogue, and I love this story. Although I wish you’d have finished it, I thank you for what you’ve done.

Ok, Chad is not a genius. Gohan is just a fucking idiot. There are like so many better ways he could have done it. Shit, he could have just used raw power.

This is why stories about a human beating Gohan isn't very fun. Because it takes random plot holes, dumbassery on unbelievable levels, and ignoring Gohan's ability. Oh, and some dumb ass self-righteousness.

Gohan can sense Ki. He can sense Chad.

For fucks sakes, why did he use the dragonballs before finding Chad?

Why did he do anything that he did? What the fuck is going on? How did a bomb hurt him? Why the fuck did he give the dragonball radar? Why the fuck didn't he capture the dude? What the fuck is Vegeta doing? Why didn't he talk to Bulma beforehand. Why doesn't Bulma do something? Why doesn't he ask dende about Chad. Why doesn't he use his ki to bind? Why don't they tell the others?

What kind of fucking dumbass reason is "I don't want to worry them?". Oh, there is a dude who could destroy your lives, but I'm not going to tell you because I don't want to worry you so you won't be able to defend yourself or help me.

Why didn't Gohan tell anyone about Chad before hand?

Why didn't Gohan make a wish before the war to stop Chad, etc?

Dude, Gohan can act faster than some dumb bomb.

Ok, here is an alternative to Gohan's plan. Capture Goon, take him to capsule corps. Interrogate him. Find his plans, etc etc. Media control. If nothing else, use dragonballs.

So this doctor didn't have a backup of his son's memory core? What?

Why is Gohan being such an idiot?

Oh I almost died. Better keep it a complete secret because "oh wanna close that chapter"

The fuck is that bullshit? There is a weird super threatening enemy that just randomly showed up. He almost died. And he decided that since they were "probably" dead, MUST KEEP IT A SECRET BECAUSE I DON'T WANT TO TALK.

That is a dumb reason for them not to know something later on because gohan decided to keep it a secret.

Thankyou for giving us the outline!

Haha! I love Pomo! Also it warms my heart that Gohan cares about the former servants of Duran. Thankyou for writing that

Excellent work! I like how the characters are so indepth

Dang! This is excellent! Also, I like this Erasa! She’s actually smart and not just a headache

Man this was excellent! I love it! I like that the villains and the plot are actually complex and interesting instead of stupid cliche like in kid show and unfortunately dbz. I love your portrayal of Vegeta! Your have him portrayed as still gruff on the outside but genuinely changed into a good person on the inside. People usually portray him as still evil but kept restrain by his wife and The z warriors