Again, very dark - and I can't quite place my finger on why! I especially love the dialogue, it flows so effortlessly. And don't worry about delays! It happens to everyone - and I have four more chapters to read!

Oh, interesting... And I like this new Hein. He's cold, but he realizes it, so he's not so far gone as the original...

Hein feeling he was cold? Now there's irony! Absolutly gripping. Brilliant.

mumble mumble Like this a lot mumble mumble Very Interesting mumble mumble The world blurred to adrenaline? lovely turn of phrase mumble mumble Cant's wait for the next chapter! :)

Interesting.

Very, very interesting.

Oh, you *would* do this to me, wouldn't you? I just logged out about a minute ago because there was nothing new here, and then I find the alert for this! *grumbles*

Anyway...

Curioser and curioser... I definately find this story interesting so far, even if it does feature original characters. And a commander Hein. Never a bad thing.

COMMANDER HEIN! Blimey, I'm very disturbed already. Again, intriguing, and as always, very well written. And yes, insanity can be fun. So is amnesia. Hang on, what was I writing about again? Who am I?

I am glad some1 is doing a 'SW story, there arent any these days!

It's a bit...well the plot is bacoming clearer but im still trying to gather it! It is good though, keep it up!

That was really interesting! A little strange but good! :) keep it up!

Interesting start so far! I'm curious to see who these people are and how the world has changed since TSW. Keep going!

I liked this. Intruiging. Rebel's against whom? You'd have thought the world had learned it's lesson by now (but then it wouldn't be such an interesting story!) And no, Ovo, I don't think you're insane. I talk to myself quite frequently, and the purple monkey still comes and visits me from time to time *gibbers*

Okay, I'm intrigued. But then, I think I'm one of the rare people who loved FF:TSW, so I want to see more.