So vivi isn't interested in luffy anymore?

didnt like this chapter tho

so it was reversed and vivi was the one who got sick, huh

You son of a bitch! The story was great but it was supposed to be VIVI...VIVI there are plenty of LuNa stories out there. Dammit!

Damn! This is one of the best fics i have read in a while, I especially like ling ones. It ended really well in my opinion though...but i know this is late and i have read the entire thing, but its alabasta not arabasta...in the japanese anime and manga that is how they pronounce it

Good stuff

Crazy shitt

2nd commander

It's a great story but luffy is out of character he would never try to punch his friends

I want a sequel

Just overall the fanfic was alright but what really made it bad was when vivi got sick. I know you said you changed it but you should of really just stuck with how it actually goes. There was some other parts that killed it but I'm not going to mention. Other than those little parts that killed the story it was actually good so thumps in the middle slightly up

It's supposed to be vivi idiot

ok i know its hard but people just don't get luffy right i mean he's so hard to show and write he has a whole life and it quite hard to make a replica and he would never punch his friends over food

Nuuuuh Vivi-chan is gonna get her heart broken. That damn nami. Why couldn't she take zoro. I would. He would be my slave MOHAHAHA. *cough* srry.

please make in a sexy romantic sequel