This is a rather boring start. It’s just like the beginning of every other Mary-Sue falls in love with James/Remus/Sirius in the past before Voldemort ruins their lives. Dumbledore didn’t sound as old as he should have, which is bad characterization. And how in the world would Remus know of a Beauxbatons student? They’re in France; Hogwarts is in Scotland, how would they meet? And, while everyone hates and knows Peter is a backstabbing, sniveling, two-faced, son of a bitch; he was friends with them once upon a time and shouldn’t be portrayed as an idiot. He’s not as clever as the other three Marauders, but he isn’t an idiot either.

And, for the Harry Potter categories sake, please don’t write yet another story about Girl A falling in love with Marauder A, when she originally crushed on Marauder B; or the other plot which is Girl A falls in love with Marauder A, and Marauder B is a miserable, self-sacrificing hero. Do I care if you claim your plot wasn’t going to do that? No, not really, because it was most likely going to do some variation of it, have a good day.

Cute story! Keep going! If not for anyone else, do it for ME! XD But for real though, please continue.

Love ya for life,

butterflyangel3

Poor Peter. Interesting start.