Dear Shayde:

Interesting that he doesn't spare any thoughts for how he treated Snape.

Sincerely,
Qoheleth

How can you not like this story? It's brilliant.

It's written beautifully, James is quite in character, and it's very believable.

I can find nothing to critisize!

And, I can't believe you're only twelve.

Ah, you can still muster a lump in my throat.

I was surprised to see how short this was, at first. But then I read it.

It is really very good. I think you got the characterizatiosn down pat.

I wish there had been a bit about Snape, or a little more about Sirius, but hey - when you're dead...

Good job. _

really nice. poor prongs. i see he didnt focus much on poor prisoner padfoot. why not? you should make more chapters to this, like having lily, moony, padfoot, wormtail, petunia, dumbles, and maybe even this jake hall fellow's thoughts during the same time james was thinking here. 'twould be interesting. i would say harry too, but who knows what one year old's think?

OMG! *sniffles* That was so sad. Really well written, but really sad, too.

Regards,

Ari

Oh God, the sadness! Will there be anymore?

How very sad. Beautifully written, but sad. I almost expected an upbeat ending, but I like how you wrote it too. I can't really think of anything to criticize (which, believe me, is rare... I am the single most critical person ever), except there is one or two grammatical errors, but nothing big. Excellent story!