Great story. I love it when she calls him a nerf herder.

Love the gag gifts everyone was getting Carth.

Jolee really knows how to help patch things up.

Good job!

aw!

Cool interpretation of what Jedi powers can be used to do. The characters don't *quite* flow like their game-personas, which I think is the only hinderance to making this story really great. Well, in the context of your other stories, this story complements your related-universe stories well, but on its own I think it falls a little flat. Still, I like the concept behind it, and the writing itself is solid.

I'm not sure about this... hmm.

My stars, I really liked it. Your writing style is simple (meaning you don't have to use too many details to tell your story) yet beautiful. I've always loved Jolee and Carth despite wanting to dislike him. I *really* do hope you planned to write more. Possibly a Carth and Revan seen?

Interesting. I hope to see more of the other characters, especially Dustil (he should get the opportunity to see his mother). Love the interaction between Jolee and Carth.

Great! I think you captured Jolee's personality especially well.

ah, wonderful!

Sweet... really sweet, and well-written. I really enjoyed this! :) Good work!