What is this garbage? No, I don't want nojiko and sanji together since he chases skirts... part of the reason why I wanted to read a luffy and nami fanfic besides for the fact the couple is actually good.

Not to mention, if you have sex in there, it should be rated m even though you wrote a half ass lemon, if you would even call it that. It sounds like you need to do an outline first to get to a plot and a LOT of proofreading.

Hopefully you can improve. But make sure to include a better summary with a list of pairings and warnings next time. Good luck

Nami would never reach like that to such a corny joke "Hey sun, She isn't done watching you set!" she isnt the type to laugh at idiotic things such as that

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I can't believe it took me this long to realise, but you are a very unfortunate person. Assuming that the context of this story reflect your personal experiences with the show, then you have only ever seen the 4Kids version. I am so sorry for you.

dragon

Good story,very romantic i think you should write more...

remember to create a new paragraph every time a different character starts talking. for example:

"Thank you for help on beating Arlong and his gang, Luffy." said Nami.

"You're welcome, Nami, besides you're a member of my crew." said her rubbery captain.

Aah, it's romance, I have no say in how far you wish to go on it! M, nice chapter, please update when possible!

This is nice, it follows along like the manga/anime did, only with LuffyxNami and some other stuff like pitting all of the pirates that Luffy fought against him.

Sorry but I'm gonna have to pass on that two chapter offer. As tempting as it sounds, I can really only handle one chapter. I have a very...active imagination and my chapters tend to be very long. Why? I don't know, my fingers are the boss of the keyboard, not me!

Uh, did you recheck your rating before you posted this chapter? Seriously man, lay off the sex, it kinda spoils the romance. Believe me, it really does. Well, yours is short so that's a plus. Any longer and you'd find it hard to focus lol! Well, that's me!

Nice job on adding all of the villains Luffy's kicked the snot out of! Now, to see what happens next...

Whoa, quickie lemon! From chapter 1 to 2 and now they're already doing it! Cannot look, must not spoil LuffyxNami moment. Eh, wait? -.- Damn, no details!

Hey, a LxN fic that takes place after Luffy kicks Arlong's fishman's butt, yay! Okay but a few things to note:

1. Although it sounds like it isn't, his name IS Zoro, NOT Zolo. But if you watched the dub then you're just as fooled as I was. I'm going with Zoro though; if the lawsuits come, my seven bloodthirsty swords will be ready. Hehehe, my own homemade, Nantoryuu: Seven Swords Style.

2. It's nice that Sanji is okay with Luffy and Nami getting together but seriously, I doubt he'd easily agree like that! I'm more into seeing the characters in originality but hey, it's your fic, won't complain, just hope you can keep us entertained. Frankly, I'm more of a 'keep-Sanji-in-character-by-making-him-see-LuffyxNami-and-also-make-him-suffer-get-jealous-and-get-in-their-way!' Yes, I'm cruel to Sanji but I could never love One Piece if I ever saw SanjixNami, ever. Same with ZoroxNami. Btw, Zoro and Sanji are two of the best OP main characters, after Luffy.

3. Romance kinda was rushed. I don't like rushed romance but seeing the adventure genre got me still here. But I'll give it a shot and see what happens. The reason I don't like rushed romance is because I want to see it 'develop' story-wise. Now, if it were a humor fic in a way, I could understand since humor's supposed to make you laugh.

None of that was supposed to sound like a flame. Seriously, I hate flaming and will only flame those who flame me first. Heck I won't even use flames! I'll borrow Zoro's 'Yaki Oni Giri' to flame AND cut those flamers with their own flames! Yeah, I have an obsession with fire. That reminds me; touching the stove while it is hot is the stupidest thing I've ever heard. Who'd do such a stupid thing!

cool

Cute

aww... it was short, yet cute. on the contrary i really like your work. *Adds the story to favorites*