Nice, dark and promising... Please write more!

Very nice _ The bit about Japanese modernisation and human discontent is something I have been trying to work into my fan fiction of late ... but you, in a few paragraphs, have said it more clearly and articulately than I could manage in ten chapters. (Not an exaggeration, either. ) Great work.

nice...I like the imagery good detail and clarification. the language is well written and its obvious you checked for spelling and grammer over all I can't wait until the next one comes out!

arigatou

kalki

I'm glad to see that you've posted something again. I was begining to give up on the hope that you would still write Miyu fics. I am glad to stand mistaken. Please keep up the good work! _

I just love VPM fics, and this is one of the job!

I like it. I haven't watch the anime yet, but I have a sense of what it is about. And through that infomation, I would say this is a good story. Please write more.

Great fic, very enjoyable. And as for your request of "glaringly huge errors"...it was your use of Japanese. _~ The Japanese have humble and honorific forms of most of their words; familial terms are no exception. You use the honorable when speaking to them, so you would say oneesan (or oneechan, whatever), not ane. Other than that I loved it.

This is a wonderful beginning. Please continue. _