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oi, me chamo tina e realmente gostei da sua estoria, ela tem um fundo de verdade e realmente poderia ser algo q acontecesse entre eles, acho que você tem duas direções a partir de agora, 1º fazer com que a Olivia se comporte como uma "vitima" levando isso para um lado mais escuro, mas considerando o fato dele não se lembrar e não o ato em si e 2º fazer com que ela tente ignorar o que aconteceu, fazendo com que ele não se lembre do que aconteceu até que ele( de preferencia os dois juntos) descubra que ela estar gravida e bom que eles briguem um pouquinho antes de ficarem juntos( não gosto quanto eles se juntam sem um pouco de discórdia ).
bom sinto muito pela perca da sua musa, e de você ter parado de escrever( pelo menos essa estoria) , quanto a escrever ou ler fanfic pouca gente entende principalmente os pais. Desculpe se dei muitas opiniões na sua estoria mas é que eu realmente não consigo tirar ela da cabeça,e novamente desculpa se falei demais é que costumo ser uma eleitora "fantasma", espero realmente que você encontre inspiração para voltar a escrever e terminar essa estoria por que ela estava no caminho certo ( pelo menos pra mim.).

liked it! i really want you to go on...

Please go on!

Am I loving this fic or what? This is awesome! It's so cute! _

omfgz.

I love it so far.

And I almost had a heart attack when I found out Kathy and Elliot seperated. I'm as much of a EO shipper as you are! _ Kudos!

I can't wait to read more.

Long live EO shippers.

WHAT! NO WAY! this is so good, but I don't know how i feel about it. elliot doesn't seem to be a character to have rough sex, but that was very good. I hope you don't have olivia cry rape. that would just be dumb. maybe elliot sees one of her bruises and realizes what he did, they apologize and make up. i don't know. this is really good, and i have never read a story like this. its tragic but good. im looking foward to seeing where you take this. there is a lot of ways you could take it. best of luck and hope to read more soon.

onetreefan

love your story! I am so glad you like mine too- I find our writing styles are really similar (the humor and the drama and the romance all mixed together) and you've done it brilliantly. and it's actually kind of nice that the sex scene was one paragraph, because I just skipped over it and didn't have to worry about running into anything else later. (I know, I'm such an obedient 15 year old, eh?) sorry about your muse. I KNOW EXACTLY HOW IT FEELS. (see AN of 'WHAT IF' chapter 13) sometimes you completely lose it, and you find no way of getting it back. the only thing I can recommend is watching the show and renting a movie. seriously, once other people's ideas start running through your head, it's a lot easier to meld them into your own. it's always worked great for me. keep up the awesome job!

Please, please, please finish this! It's great and I wanna know what happens next!

M

Wow, what an intense chapter! Drunk Elliot not realizing his strength, and Olivia hiding it from him. However will he react when he finds out? How will he find out? You have me hooked- so now write more!

I could definitely go for another chapter or two...I'm interested to see how it'll turn out. Keep it up!

i love it! hope u continue!

That was so good I think that you should definatly continue... Will Elliot remember...everything? I think he should notice her bruises and ask what had happened?

hey,that was good, the only thing is, elliot would hurt somebody when he was angry and drunk, but he would never hurt olivia, ever. i know that its a part of your plot, but it seems a little out of charecter. loved it though

up date now- damn it! jk.

im not sure i like that elliot didnt remember or that he was to rough... not even sure i like this story...