More please

Very good story and very interested in an update.

ok you've got a really good story but you really need to update it soon i mean its been 4 years according to what it says since you last updated. i hope naruto's gonna come back all badass with the chicks all wanting some o his lovin lol. also maybe it'd be good to upgrade the rating to an m and add in a little blood snot and gore along with the occasional lemony action.

.CHAPTERS...ARE...AWESOME!

By the way you mispelled LOOK you spelled LOOKE its LOOK

good story update soon.

The idea is a bit overworked, but you've done good with it anyways by adding in your own bit of originality.

How the hell is he getting back, though? Who and what exactly is this new girl? Was she part of the Jedi Council, maybe even one of the original Masters? Perhaps she is like the Dimensional Witch in the manga/anime 'Tsubasa', who watches over the connections between worlds?

Oh well, what comes will come. I'm really looking forward to the rewrite.

Also, a few little pointers for when you rewrite:

grammar and punctuation first.

more descriptive stuff, besides just some basic physical description; especially where any sort of action is involved.

reading your story out loud to yourself, and make sure that you are actually reading it word for word, instead of letting your brain fill up the little gaps automatically. Doing this will let you know where and what needs improvement.

some more action wherever there is action, such as when they were fighting against the bandit army.

5. Try experimenting with different fonts for different types of speech, as well as using different markings, such as using a ' at the ends of thoughts.

As a parting gift, I also present my services as a Beta-Reader to you, free of charge. I work quickly and am thorough in my work.

With absolute sincerity and a wish of good luck,

-MasterMenth

(P.S. - I still can't figure out how to spell 'thorough' properly...do you know how?)

This an awesome story but why haven't you updated in two years.

P.s Update as soon as poosible

very good chap keep up the fine job

i hope you update soon its getting good

Please Give Naruto A lightsaber if you do ill give you a cake please please please please.

Is this story done or what. I hope it isn't I like it. Update sometime this year Please!

this is sweet, i look forward to more

awsome

How disappointing your capriciousness is. Oh, well. I can't wait to see what exactly your next update will hold, IF you even update this at all.

QUESTION: what the fuck is so great about a keysword? and please continue this story. its really good!