Bad, over-discriptive rapefic. An excuse to write sex.

that was an interesting read - but very good - have u considered writnig romance? caus you are good

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enough said!

Wow, that was interesting. Coriopat as Demeter's mate, huh? Good idea, I'd never thought of that before. This is a great, short story. Sometimes less is more. I'd love it if it was carried on..pretty please?

Damn! It was worth sitting through all those similies for that ending. Just... damn. lol Never would have thought to put Demeter in conjunction with Tantomile/Coricopat. (Just which one of them is she with now, I'm not too clear on that.)

Personally, next time I'd like you to forgo all that 'little diamonds of water' and that 'his tonge wiggled inside her mouth like a foul worm' thing... rather than making me gag (like I'm sure it was supposed to) it really made me laugh.

I know they tell you that similies are very creative, in in actuality they work best when used sparingly. Very sparingly.